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The city of Springsby has a plan to make improvements in Western Road Area.

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The city of Springsby has a plan to make improvements in Western Road Area. It believes that all changes will might be good for developed that small town. The students will have a bus station closer to school that will facilitate their mobility during the class time. Rather than, it will have a Shopping Centre across from the school that will help students and parents to make meals and to enjoy a little bit in their free time. At Park Avenue, improvements will be built like, for example, a car park next to the Lake. This way more people can go there because it is safe and easier to leave the car in the car park. One more car park will be built in the Shopping Centre that will help a lot of the costumers and students. In conclusion, this small city will benefit from these changes. Students, parents and all people that live in Springsby will be proud this “new area”.
The city of
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Springsby
has a plan to
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make
improvements in Western Road Area. It believes that all
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changes
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will might
be
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for developed that
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small
town.

The students will have a bus station closer to school that will facilitate their mobility during the
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class
time.
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than, it will have a Shopping
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across from the school that will
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help
students and parents to
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make
meals and to enjoy a
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little bit
in their free time.

At
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Park
Avenue, improvements will
be built
like,
for example
, a
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car
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park
next
to the Lake. This way more
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people
can go there
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because
it is safe and easier to
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leave
the
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car
in the
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car
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park
. One more
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car
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park
will
be built
in the Shopping
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Centre
that will
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a lot of
the costumers and students.

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, this
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small
city will benefit from these
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changes
. Students, parents and all
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that
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in
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Springsby
will be proud this “new area”.

IELTS essay The city of Springsby has a plan to make improvements in Western Road Area.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
162 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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