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With the development of online, there is no future for the radio. To what extent do you agree? v.1

With the development of online, there is no future for the radio. v. 1
There is an issue about the future of radio. Some Internet followers claim that radio will vanish in the future owing to the popularity of the web. This essay disagrees with their viewpoint. Let us start with reasons why some internet supporters state radio will disappear in the future because of the Internet. The first reason is that people can read the news and listen to music on the Internet. People can find either any news or piece of music on the web, so it is unnecessary for them both to turn on radio and to wait for news time between music breaks. Another reason is that radio stations also broadcast their programs digitally online. People do not have to abandon their favorite radio channels, because they can listen to them online. Furthermore, radio signals are unavailable in remote areas. Radio listeners usually cannot enjoy radio in the countryside, since radio signals weaken through both hills and mountains, but with the help of the satellite connection, they are always connected to the web. However, some radio followers believe that radio will remain for a long time. They justify their opinion with the following arguments. Firstly, radio is both free and widespread. In contrast to the web, radio listeners do not have to pay for the Internet to listen to the radio, because radio receivers, which are present in nearly every modern device, can accept pervasive radio waves. Secondly, radio programs are usually transmitted live. Most people usually find radio more interesting to listen to, since it casts the news as well as different entertaining programs in real time. Moreover, radio is relevant to a particular region. On the Internet, it is difficult for news seekers to find information about their region, but radio channels can supply them with it, because they usually focus on events in their hometown. In conclusion, although some online promoters argue that the Internet can cause the death of radio, I think that this sort of information and entertainment will stay unaffected, as long as it is free and amusing.
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.
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Some
Internet followers claim that
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radio
will vanish in the future owing to the popularity of the web. This essay disagrees with their viewpoint.

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Let
us
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start
with reasons why
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some
internet supporters state
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radio
will disappear in the future
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because
of the Internet. The
first
reason is that
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people
can read the
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news
and
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listen
to music on the Internet.
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People
can find either any
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news
or piece of music on the web,
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so
it is unnecessary for them both to turn on
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radio
and to wait for
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news
time between music breaks. Another reason is that
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radio
stations
also
broadcast their programs
digitally
online.
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People
do not
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have to
abandon their favorite
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radio
channels,
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because
they can
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listen
to them online.
Furthermore
,
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radio
signals are unavailable in remote areas.
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Radio
listeners
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usually
cannot enjoy
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radio
in the countryside, since
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radio
signals weaken through both hills and mountains,
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but
with the
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help
of the satellite connection, they are always connected to the web.

However
,
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some
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radio
followers believe that
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radio
will remain for a long time. They justify their opinion with the following arguments.
Firstly
,
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radio
is both free and widespread.
In contrast
to the web,
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radio
listeners do not
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have to
pay for the Internet to
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listen
to the
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radio
,
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because
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radio
receivers, which are present in
nearly
every modern device, can accept pervasive
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radio
waves.
Secondly
,
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radio
programs are
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usually
transmitted
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live
. Most
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people
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usually
find
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radio
more interesting to
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listen
to, since it casts the
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news
as well
as
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different
entertaining programs in real time.
Moreover
,
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radio
is relevant to a particular region. On the Internet, it is difficult for
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news
seekers to find information about their region,
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but
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radio
channels can supply them with it,
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because
they
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usually
focus on
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events
in their hometown.

In conclusion
, although
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some
online promoters argue that the Internet can cause the death of
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radio
, I
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think
that this sort of information and entertainment will stay unaffected, as long as it is free and amusing.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay With the development of online, there is no future for the radio. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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