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With the availability of information on the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

With the availability of information on the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. with this statement? v. 2
Nowadays, it is difficult to believe everything that is on news channels because most of the topics are consciously chosen, modified as per the interest of editors. Several factors influence in doing so and even we are habituated to these kind of news. I believe certainly it would be better when these were mainly positive stories rather than harsh ones. Multiple reasons can be attributed in influencing these decisions of news editors. One such aspect is the revenue that can be generated by broadcasting certain types of news. For instance, reports about the crime, war, devastation and so on are watched and read several times by the public thus it becomes a source of income for press. Another important factor can be a political propaganda. This is to say, some news channels are bribed by political parties to promote their agendas and image. One good example of this is a recent conflict over CNN and Fox news channel since they stood for and against the American president. In short, money and fame by linking with a person in power could be the factors for the editors in favouring certain topics. Of course, I am convinced that we have become used to bad news because we have started ignoring positive reports and articles. This is consequently because the majority of news portals highlights, focus, exaggerate negative events and destructions. For example, many people in the world do not know the news that Cuba became the first country to be plastic free, but almost everyone knows the list of the most populated cities of the globe. Definitely, the earth would be a better place if more of the good stories were circulated. Eventually the press would start looking for joyous events happening around the periphery. This would send positive message to the people and ultimately help in spreading love and peace. A case in point to note is unity of people during sporting events and festivals. In conclusion, the news editors deliberately select topics to publish or broadcast as they are greedy for income and popularity hence made us habituated to disheartening news. It would definitely be nice to hear and watch happy stories on television or newspaper.
Nowadays, it is difficult to believe everything
that is
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
channels
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
most of the topics are
consciously
chosen, modified as per the interest of editors. Several factors influence in doing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
and even we
are habituated
to
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
. I believe
certainly
it would be better when these were
mainly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
stories
rather
than harsh ones.

Multiple reasons can
be attributed
in influencing these decisions of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
editors. One such aspect is the revenue that can
be generated
by broadcasting certain types of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
.
For instance
, reports about the crime, war, devastation and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watched
and read several times by the public
thus
it becomes a source of income for press. Another
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
factor can be a political propaganda. This is to say,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
channels
are bribed
by political parties to promote their agendas and image. One
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
example of this is a recent conflict over CNN and Fox
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
channel since they stood for and against the American president. In short, money and fame by linking with a person in power could be the factors for the editors in
Possible spelling mistake. 'favouring' is British English.
favouring
certain topics.

Of course
, I
am convinced
that we have become
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
we have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
ignoring
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
reports and articles. This is
consequently
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
portals highlights, focus, exaggerate
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
and
Possible spelling mistake found.
destructions
.
For example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in the world do not know the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
that Cuba became the
first
country to be plastic free,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
almost everyone knows the list of the most populated cities of the globe.

Definitely, the earth would be a better place if more of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
stories
were circulated
.
Eventually
the press would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
looking for joyous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
happening around the periphery. This would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
message to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and
ultimately
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in spreading
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and peace. A case in point to note is unity of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
during sporting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
and festivals.

In conclusion
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
editors
deliberately
select topics to publish or broadcast as they are greedy for income and popularity
hence
made us habituated to disheartening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
. It would definitely be nice to hear and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
happy stories on television or newspaper.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay With the availability of information on the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. with this statement? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
366 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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