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The table shows the amount of coal used by different by different sectors in the UK from 1975 to 2000. v.1

The table shows the amount of coal used by different by different sectors in the UK from 1975 to 2000. v. 1
Financial supporting of capable people in the arts by the government could be a compensation for them as an appreciation, while others argue that there must be other resources except the authority. However, in my viewpoint, there are other workers in the state that should be properly funded by the government. In this essay, both topical debates will be investigated before a rational conclusion. The proponents of this perspective are extremely encouraging their wish. First and foremost, there are not many individuals who have such talent in art, it is rare to find them. It can be said that they are chosen to be appreciated by the government. Moreover, the art people also could create the distinct arts for their country as the typical art to identify the characteristic of the nation. This action would bring a great name of the state, and they should be given a reward. For instance, the person who spends their time to devote at the museum of arts have to get rewarded with financial support from the authority. Hence, they could develop their skills in art as well as dedicate themselves more to the country. However, the opponents are disappointed to the government act towards the art people. Firstly, they truly think that the right individuals who have the reasonable position to receive is the doctor and the teacher. Both of these careers are the pivotal occupations that have contributed more to the all society in developing the education. It is unquestionable to say that the policy maker should provide more appreciation to them. Furthermore, the meritorious jobs are not merely those aforementioned works, yet there are other occupations which have been encouraging the development of the state. Taking economist in providing the brilliant idea to the development of economic as an example should also be appreciated by the nation. By way of conclusion, the advocates said that the worker in the creative arts has to get concerned more than the other jobs, yet the other professionals who give the prosperity to the country, reaching a great deal would be fair for them. As I would state that the authority have to treat the society with a justice and to decide any policy properly.
Financial supporting of capable
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people
in the
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arts
by the
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government
could be a compensation for them as an appreciation, while others argue that there
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must
be
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other
resources except the authority.
However
, in my viewpoint, there are
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other
workers in the
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state
that should be
properly
funded by the
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government
. In this essay, both topical debates will
be investigated
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before
a rational conclusion.

The proponents of this perspective are
extremely
encouraging their wish.
First
and foremost, there are not
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many
individuals
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who
have such talent in
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art
, it is rare to find them. It can
be said
that they
are chosen
to
be appreciated
by the
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government
.
Moreover
, the
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art
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people
also
could create the distinct
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arts
for their country as the typical
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art
to identify the characteristic of the nation. This action would bring a great name of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
state
, and they should be
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given
a reward.
For instance
, the person
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who
spends their time to devote at the museum of
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arts
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have
to
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get
rewarded with financial support from the authority.
Hence
, they could develop their
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skills
in
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art
as well
as dedicate themselves more to the country.

However
, the opponents
are disappointed
to the
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government
act towards the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
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people
.
Firstly
, they
truly
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think
that the right individuals
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who
have the reasonable position to receive is the doctor and the teacher. Both of these careers are the pivotal occupations that have contributed more to the all society in developing the education. It is unquestionable to say that the
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policy maker
should provide more appreciation to them.
Furthermore
, the meritorious jobs are not
merely
those aforementioned works,
yet
there are
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other
occupations which have been encouraging the development of the
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state
. Taking economist in providing the brilliant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to the development of economic as an example should
also
be appreciated
by the nation.

By way of conclusion, the advocates said that the worker in the creative
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arts
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has to
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get
concerned more than the
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other
jobs,
yet
the
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other
professionals
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
give the prosperity to the country, reaching a great deal would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
for them. As I would
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state
that the authority
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
treat the society with a justice and to decide any policy
properly
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The table shows the amount of coal used by different by different sectors in the UK from 1975 to 2000. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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