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With an increasing population communication via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree? v.2

With an increasing population communication via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 2
In modern era, people prefer to contact with each other either online are through messaging, and due to increase in use of these type of technology old ways of communication like face to face is losing its importance. I believe that these types of connection help people to link with each other. To begin, social networking and conversation through internet among people is becoming famous day by day. In nowadays its very easy for everyone to chat with people through internet and technology is developing very rapidly providing many ways of communication. For example, Facebook is becoming very famous in young and adult generation, and almost 2/3rd of the world population is using Facebook as way of contact. As a result of this type of communication, people able to find their old friends, and they can share a lot of things with each other. Secondly, 95% of the world population is using mobile phones, and there are a lot of softwares which are very easy and feasible for use. For instance Whats app, Viber and text messaging are using in large number for contacts, and by this way people convey their messages to others in a very easy way and in low price of money. Due to these modern types of communication, old ways of connection between people, such as face to face meeting with each other, had lost its importance. But still there are a lot of people in the world, which prefer these old types of contact with each other, but as there is shortage of time with people, so people meet face to face very less. All in all, I agree that modern technology had brought a lot of modern ways of communication, and many individuals prefer them to use these in their daily life, but still in some part of the world people use their old methods of contact with each other.
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contact
with each
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other
either online are through messaging, and due to increase in
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use
of these
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type
of technology
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old
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ways
of
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communication
like
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face
to
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face
is losing its importance. I believe that these
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types
of connection
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help
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people
to link with each other.

To
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begin
, social networking and conversation through internet among
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people
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is
becoming
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famous
day by day.
nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: "nowadays".
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its
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very
easy for everyone to chat with
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people
through internet and technology is developing
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very
rapidly
providing
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many
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ways
of
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communication
.
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, Facebook is becoming
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very
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famous
in young and adult generation, and almost 2/3rd of the
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world
population is using Facebook as
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way
of
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contact
.
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of this
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type
of
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communication
,
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people
able to find their
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old
friends, and they can share a
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lot
of things with each other.

Secondly
, 95% of the
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world
population is using mobile phones, and there are a
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lot
of
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softwares
which are
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very
easy and feasible for
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use
.
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Whats app
,
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Viber
and text messaging are using in large number for
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contacts
, and by this
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way
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people
convey their messages to others in a
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very
easy
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way
and in low price of money.

Due to these
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modern
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types
of
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communication
,
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old
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ways
of
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connection between
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people
, such as
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to
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face
meeting with each
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other
, had lost its importance.
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still
there are a
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people
in the
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world
, which prefer these
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contact
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,
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as there is shortage of time with
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people
,
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so
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people
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meet
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to
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face
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less.

All in all, I
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modern
technology had brought a
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lot
of
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modern
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ways
of
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communication
, and
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many
individuals prefer them to
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use
these in their daily life,
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some
part of the
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world
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people
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their
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methods of
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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay With an increasing population communication via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
316 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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