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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? v.6

With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 6
In the techno savvy era, due to the advancement of technology, the usage of the Internet is becoming increasing day by day. These people consider face to face interaction as a past and prefer to talk through technology by messages and Internet. This essay will discuss why a direct meeting will not be in fashion, because of the new inventions of technology and the Internet. To begin with, the people who are in the favour of commuting with a phone and a laptop, have a valid reason for that. They believe that it is a time saving factor to use technological tools to talk to anyone, because it is flexible way which one can use anywhere. For instance, if a person wants to talk to any friend, then there is no need to go to the house of that friend, because it will time consuming. However, if he/she will use the Internet to communicate, it will take less time. This is a reason why the internet should be used and the face to face interaction will be invisible. Moreover, another reason is the busy work - life. Almost all members of the family are working on these days and because of the busy schedule, they do not have time to interact with anyone. For example, a person is doing 8 hours shift in a day and he/she spends at least 2 hours of travelling, and after doing cooking, cleaning, no one has the capacity to go anywhere for face to face communication. So that is why the physical interaction is decreasing day by day. To conclude, due to the technology, the face to face communication will no longer be in use. I am an absolutely agree with the statement and the face to face interaction will definitely invisibly.
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people
consider
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to
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interaction
as a past and prefer to talk through
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technology
by messages and Internet. This essay will discuss why a direct meeting will not be in fashion,
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because
of the new inventions of
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technology
and the Internet.

To
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with, the
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people
who are in the
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favour
of commuting with a phone and a laptop, have a valid reason for that. They believe that it is a
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time
saving factor to
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use
technological tools to talk to anyone,
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because
it is
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flexible
way which one can
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use
anywhere.
For instance
, if a person wants to talk to any friend, then there is no need to go to the
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house
of that friend,
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because
it will
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time consuming
.
However
, if he/she will
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use
the Internet to communicate, it will take less
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time
. This is a reason why the internet should be
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used
and the
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face
to
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face
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interaction
will be invisible.

Moreover
, another reason is the busy work
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-
life. Almost all members of the family are working on these days and
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because
of the busy schedule, they do not have
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time
to interact with anyone.
For example
, a person is doing 8 hours shift in a
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day and
he/she spends at least 2 hours of travelling, and after
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doing cooking
, cleaning, no one has the capacity to go anywhere for
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face
to
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face
communication.
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So
that is
why the physical
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interaction
is decreasing day by day.

To conclude
, due to the
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technology
, the
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face
to
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face
communication will no longer be in
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use
. I am an
absolutely
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agree
with the statement and the
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face
to
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face
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interaction
will definitely
invisibly
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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