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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.20

The internet has greatly increased our access to information. v. 20
The Internet is one of the most incredible inventions which enables us to access countless sources of information. However, whether this is a positive thing or negative is a controversial issue. My view is that using the Internet not only widens our knowledge, but also brings us many benefits. To begin with, the Internet is a virtual trove of information. People can look up for information on any topic on the Internet by using search engines, such as Google, Yahoo, and other websites. Many websites will appear in front of them after a few seconds, saving us plenty of time overlooking the information up in the library. Moreover, the cost of this search is none. You do not have to pay for anything over the cost of internet access. Therefore, it is now playing a crucial role in our daily life and has become the most versatile tools in human hands. It is also true that every issue has two sides. Besides the advantages, we cannot neglect the negative things. Parents cannot control what content their kids view because everyone, including children, is free to access any information. Furthermore, there are also many hackers nowadays, so that individuals can be stolen their private information without notice. However, the digital world is being developed day-to-day by humans. I believe that all the issues may be solved one day in the future. In conclusion, thanks to the internet, we can have a great opportunity of accessing a trove of information. Meanwhile, we should not ignore its adverse effects. Only by doing so can we make sure that we are using the internet in the right way.
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information
.
However
, whether this is a
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positive
thing or
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negative
is a controversial issue. My view is that using the Internet not
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only
widens our knowledge,
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but
also
brings us
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many
benefits.

To
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begin
with, the Internet is a virtual trove of
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information
.
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People
can look up for
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information
on any topic on the Internet by using search engines, such as Google, Yahoo, and other websites.
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Many
websites will appear in front of them after a few seconds, saving us
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plenty
of time overlooking the
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information
up in the library.
Moreover
, the cost of this search is none. You do not
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have to
pay for anything over the cost of internet access.
Therefore
, it is
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now
playing a crucial role in our daily life and has become the most versatile tools in human hands.

It is
also
true that every issue has two sides.
Besides
the advantages, we cannot neglect the
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negative
things. Parents cannot control what content their kids view
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because
everyone, including children, is free to access any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
.
Furthermore
, there are
also
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many
hackers nowadays,
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so
that individuals can
be stolen
their private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
without notice.
However
, the digital world is
being developed
day-to-day by humans. I believe that all the issues may
be solved
one day in the future.

In conclusion
, thanks to the internet, we can have a great opportunity of accessing a trove of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
. Meanwhile, we should not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
its adverse effects.
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Only
by doing
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so
can we
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make
sure that we are using the internet in the right way.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay The internet has greatly increased our access to information. v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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