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Wild animals are kept in zoos all over world

Wild animals are kept in zoos all over world DYRoE
Wild animals are kept in zoos all over world. At present, zoos are a tourist attraction in many countries and need wild animals to attract vistors. I beleve that wild creatures should not be kept in zoos and there should be alternative ways to see them. There are many good reasons for having zoos in our cities. Most importantly, they attract tourists and make money for city. Visitors get chance to see wild animals that they would not see unless they travelled far away. Rare species, like Chinese panda, or Indian tiger, or African rhino for example, are endangered and if we had no zoos they would die. Zoos care for these aminals and give us chance to see them. Therefore, we cannot underestimate teh educational importance of zoos. However, many people feel that wild animals should be free. They should not be kept in cages and small areas in zoo. This is cruel for animal and they often die because they is not in natural habitat. We frequently see news story about rare animals dying in zoos or getting sick because area is not big enough or suitable for wild animals like lions or polar bears. Also, these animals are unhappy and sometimes attack humans. Caging wild animals is unhealthy for the animals and is cruel. Both views put forward valid points, however, I strongly believe that zoos are no place for wild animals. If animals need to be cared for, they should be looked after in theier natural habitat in game parks or wildlife reserves. Goverments should look after the precious wild animals at their country and should close down zoos that profit from them. In conclusion, although people believe that zoos are good places to keep wild animals because they can earn money and educate people, I feel that we do not need zoos anymore. We can look at wild animals on the internet and we can feel happy knowing that they are free.
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countries and need wild
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in zoos and there should be alternative ways to
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reasons for having zoos in our cities. Most
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money for city. Visitors
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chance to
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that they would not
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unless they travelled far away. Rare species, like Chinese panda, or Indian tiger, or African rhino
for example
,
are endangered
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them.
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educational importance of zoos.

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feel that wild
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should be free. They should not be
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in cages and
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areas in zoo. This is cruel for
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news story about rare
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dying in zoos or getting sick
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area is not
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or suitable for wild
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like lions or polar bears.
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are unhappy and
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attack humans. Caging wild
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is unhealthy for the
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and is cruel.

Both views put forward valid points,
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natural habitat in game parks or wildlife reserves.
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at their country and should close down zoos that profit from them.

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places to
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, I feel that we do not need zoos anymore. We can look at wild
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on the
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internet and
we can feel happy knowing that they are free.
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IELTS essay Wild animals are kept in zoos all over world

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