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There are many reasons why I want to join youth leaderships development organizations, I can step out of my comfort zone and participate in activities organized by AIESEC. Besides, I want to be able to challenge myself with new jobs, new majors. I'm a student in the faculty of foreign language, I have no experience with operations, marketing or sales, but I'm young, I have a passionate heart to learn new things. When learning about AIESEC, I realized that AIESEC gives me a lot of opportunities to learn about new professions, learn about myself. Everyone has a chance to try. So why not give it a try. I believe AIESEC will be a place where I can learn many things. I will try my best to be able to achieve the goals I set out. I am a young person with an open mind, courage, ready to face any challenge. AIESEC is a playground that offers a lot of opportunities that I want to achieve.
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IELTS essay why you want to join AIESEC

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165 words
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