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why you choose this scholarship?

why you choose this scholarship? ra5ko

Nitori international scholarship has a history of awarding scholarships to promising young students from developing countries to bring knowledge, skills, and leadership abilities to their home communities. This scholarship awards students who had excellent academic achievements and actively participated in activities contributing to society in the spirit of self-reliance. Because of this, I do think I’m a perfect fit because not only do I meet the criteria of a 3. 94 GPA, my extracurricular activities are active at nearly 4 years in my university. Since a freshman, I participated on the dancing team and won many awards. Apart from this, I was a member of The Associated Organ of Vietnamese Students’ Association, Faculty of Business Management where I was in charge of organizing and planning events for student participants. Some typical programs must be mentioned such as the talk show “How to build a startup company for younger” with Ms. Truong Ly Hoang Phi (Executive Director of Business Startup Support Center, Vice Chairman of Young Business People Association of Ho Chi Minh City) and Mr. Le Dang Khoa (CEO of Ba La Xanh Fertilizer Joint Stock Company, CEO of The Bamboo Villages) as the speaker, talk show “Dare to change”. . . In addition, a year ago, I had an opportunity to become an organizer of TECHFEST 2020- the largest annual event for innovative startups by the Ministry of Science and Technology in collaboration with ministries, sectors, localities, and political - commune organizations associations organized. I had the opportunity to meet and work with famous entrepreneurs and startup projects… Besides, I am also the leader of 2 out of 3 topics scientific research students. Although the final result of the contest was not as high as I expected, I have learned many skills from this like leadership, teamwork, analysis. . . After completing this research, I realize that I have a great passion for scientific research. In conclusion, I hope that with what I shared above, I can be award this scholarship. With 13 million VND, I can afford IELTS test fees and push me further toward my dreams of one day having a successful career as a Marketing chief officer.

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