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Why you apply to financial aid

Why you apply to financial aid 96Qkj
As I wrote in the first answer, it seems like I waste a bit of my time studying and try in a field that I do not belong to. That is why now when I find out my real passion I do not want to wait any time to consider it. My start is late so I need to run more and working more harder to reach my dream which is to become a real data scientist, who can work and play with numbers, who can build an excellent model to help every business decision is right. All my knowledge before was from online, where I studying by myself that is why this course will help me to synthetic all the knowledge and give me a chance to have a valid certificate to applying for a new job as a data scientist position. I appreciate that I live in an age where every action can do online, when I can be flexible to study, schedule, control my timeline as well as update new information just by one touch and reach my goal faster and easier.
As I wrote in the
first
answer, it seems like I waste a bit of my time studying and try in a field that I do not belong to.
That is
why
now
when I find out my real passion I do not want to wait any time to consider it. My
start
is late
so
I need to run more and working
more harder
to reach my dream which is to become a real data scientist, who can work and play with numbers, who can build an excellent model to
help
every business decision is right.

All my knowledge
before
was from online, where
I studying
by myself
that is
why this course will
help
me to synthetic all the knowledge and give me a chance to have a valid certificate to applying for a new job as a data scientist position.

I appreciate that I
live
in an age where every action can do online, when I can be flexible to study, schedule, control my timeline
as well
as update new information
just
by one touch and reach my goal faster and easier.
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IELTS essay Why you apply to financial aid

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
185 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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