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Why people rent their house than owning a home.

Why people rent their house than owning a home. p1wxd
People like to rent their home rather than owning in some of the countries. In my opinion, the prices of lands increasing over the time which make owning a house more beneficial and expensive to buy a new house. Firstly, the essay will discuss why people rent their home instead of buying one. Secondly, will discuss the positive and negative impact of this situations. Nowadays, people becoming more less responsible and do not intend stay in a one place. They like to travel the world, so they avoid owning their own place. Also, young people like to share their home as well as their rent. Moreover, there are no free lands to build new houses in some countries. However, to buy a house people will have to take home loans that they will have to pay for their whole life. Although, sometime monthly rents are more higher than the monthly loan payments. On top of that, they will need to buy new furniture, kitchen inventories and other necessary items which are also expensive. On other hand, mostly rented houses come with the furniture and essential items. Moreover, when renting a home, a huge deposit is needed, and landlords give strict rules to follow. If they have their own house, they can do whatever they want without any landlord’s pressure. Some jobs require, workers to travel and move to other places time to time which is easy when they are renting otherwise they will have to keep their home empty until they arrive back. One of the key positive impact of owning a house is the price of the property which will escalate every year. In conclusion, renting their home is more positive than building their own home which is relatively cheap and allow them to travel and move into other locations. Word count - 301
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some of the
countries. In my opinion, the prices of lands increasing over the time which
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make
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owning
a
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house
more beneficial and expensive to
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buy
a new
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house
.
Firstly
, the essay will discuss why
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people
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rent
their home
instead
of buying one.
Secondly
, will discuss the
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positive
and
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impact of
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situations.

Nowadays,
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people
becoming
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more less
responsible and do not intend stay in a one place. They like to travel the world,
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so
they avoid
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owning
their
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own
place.
Also
, young
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people
like to share their home
as well
as their
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rent
.
Moreover
, there are no free lands to build new
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houses
in
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some
countries.

However
, to
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buy
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will
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take home loans that they will
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pay for their whole life.
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Although
, sometime monthly
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rents
are
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more higher
than the monthly loan payments.
On top of that
, they will need to
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buy
new furniture, kitchen inventories and
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other
necessary items which are
also
expensive. On
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other
hand,
mostly
rented
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houses
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come
with the furniture and essential items.
Moreover
, when renting a home, a huge deposit
is needed
, and landlords give strict
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rules
to follow. If they have their
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own
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house
, they can do whatever they want without any landlord’s pressure.
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Some
jobs require, workers to travel and
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move
to
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other
places time to time which is easy when they are renting
otherwise
they will
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have to
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keep
their home empty until they arrive back. One of the key
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positive
impact of
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owning
a
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house
is the price of the property which will escalate every year.

In conclusion
, renting their home is more
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positive
than building their
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own
home which is
relatively
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cheap
and
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allow
them to travel and
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move
into
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other
locations.

Word count
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301
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IELTS essay Why people rent their house than owning a home.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
304 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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