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Why need living alone (zs)

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Living at home with mom and dad are safe and in protected environment. However, they won't learn the hard lessons of life. I think that young people should leave home and learn to become independent. First of all, young people living alone will learn how to become self-relient and make decisions independently. For examples they learn how to clean their house, cooking and pay the bills. Moreover, they will get to know themself better. They will learn about themself that they never realized before. For example, exploring future goals and personal values can help them gain some insight on they identity. Thus, a well developed sense of self can make it easier to identify what they want and need from relationships with others. To sum up, living alone is a very real way for young people. Many basic skills will be learned from experiences.
Living at home with mom and dad are safe and in protected environment.
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, they won't
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, young
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living alone will
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learn
how to become
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decisions
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how to clean their
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, cooking and pay the bills.
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better. They will
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about
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insight on
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they identity
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well developed
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it easier to identify what they want and need from relationships with others.

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real way for young
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IELTS essay Why need living alone (zs)

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
144 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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