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In The Future, More People Will Choose To Go On Holiday In Their Own Country. Do you agree or disagree?

In The Future, More People Will Choose To Go On Holiday In Their Own Country. ra0dk
Travelling and exploring places is one of the best sources of entertainment. It is believed by a certain sections of the society that in the coming years people will trend to choose their home country over international destinations. However, I completely disagree with this statement. and I believe that people will travel during their holiday different nation. There are several good reasons that can Compel one to go against of the statement. To begin with people always want to explore new places to get new experience and know about other countries. Most of the individuals these days like to spent their holiday in colourful place. Moreover, those people living in the cold region they prefers to visit warmer nations. For instance, according to recent survey conducted by the tourism industRY countries like Pakistan Indonesia attract more than 70% of the tourists from all over the world. Thus, it helps the countries to boost their economy, and at the same time it helps the tourists to explore the international destinations. On the other hand, some people always enjoy vacation their own land. Firstly, some people financial condition does not allow them explore or visit in foreign countries. therefore, they only enjoy holiday in own nation. Secondly, in these days people much more scared, about COVID-19 they want stay in own country as much as they can. In conclusion, although some people's first choice to enjoy vacation own country. However, I believe, large number of individuals will visit different nation during their holiday.
Travelling and exploring places is one of the best sources of entertainment. It
is believed
by a certain sections of the society that in the coming years
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people
will trend to choose their home
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country
over international destinations.
However
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and
I believe that
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people
will travel during their
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holiday
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different
nation.

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good
reasons that can Compel one to go against of the statement. To
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begin
with
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people
always want to explore new places to
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get
new experience and know about other
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countries
. Most of the individuals these days like to spent their
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holiday
in
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colourful
place.
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, those
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people


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living
in the
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cold
region they
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prefers
to visit warmer nations.
For instance
, according to recent survey conducted by the tourism
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industRY
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countries
like Pakistan Indonesia attract more than 70% of the tourists from all over the world.
Thus
, it
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helps
the
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countries
to boost their economy, and at the same time it
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helps
the tourists to explore the international destinations.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
always enjoy vacation their
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own
land.
Firstly
,
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some
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people
financial condition does not
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allow
them
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explore
or visit in foreign
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countries
.
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therefore
, they
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only
enjoy
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holiday
in
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own
nation.
Secondly
, in these days
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people
much more scared, about COVID-19 they want stay in
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own
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country
as much as they can.

In conclusion
, although
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some
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people
's
first
choice to enjoy vacation
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own
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country
.
However
, I believe, large number of individuals will visit
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different
nation during their
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holiday
.
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IELTS essay In The Future, More People Will Choose To Go On Holiday In Their Own Country.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
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