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Why many people from countryside move to city

Why many people from countryside move to city 75Gd6
Currently, in the city more and more people are moving, there are many reasons that people move from the countryside to the city a lot. First, the chances of finding a job in the city are higher than in the countryside. Many economic experts have said that the job opportunities and salary in city higher than countryside. Second, about the entertainment, cleary that have many amusement pard, stadium for some tournaments, or water park, all that for the people that live in city. Third, in the city, it's have many shop or supermarket, or big supermarket for people shopping. But in countryside, it have some good sides. Because of the transport, countryside have clean air. Second, the food in countryside is more healthy, it's don't have fast food or fat food, just healthy food for your health, because of that, some old people move to countryside for their health. But where you lives is your choice, important is your way to live
Currently
, in the city more and more
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people
are moving, there are
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many
reasons that
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people
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move
from the
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countryside
to the city a lot.
First
, the chances of finding a job in the city are higher than in the
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countryside
.
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Many
economic experts have said that the job opportunities and salary in city higher than
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countryside
. Second, about the entertainment,
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cleary


that have
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many
amusement
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pard
, stadium for
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tournaments, or water park, all that for the
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people
that
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live
in city. Third, in the city, it's have
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many shop
or supermarket, or
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big
supermarket for
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people
shopping.
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in
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countryside
, it
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some
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good
sides.
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Because
of the transport,
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countryside
have clean air. Second, the
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food
in
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countryside
is more healthy, it's don't have
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fast
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food
or
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fat
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food
,
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just
healthy
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food
for your health,
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because
of that,
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some
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old
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people
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move
to
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countryside
for their health.
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where you
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lives
is your choice,
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important
is your way to
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live
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IELTS essay Why many people from countryside move to city

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
161 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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