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THE GROWTH OF ONLINE SHOPPING WILL ONE DAY LEAD TO ALL SHOPS IN TOWNS & CITIES CLOSING. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

THE GROWTH OF ONLINE SHOPPING WILL ONE DAY LEAD TO ALL SHOPS IN TOWNS & CITIES CLOSING. PWbxX
E-Commerce industry is currently the most blooming industry in business. With advancement in ecommerce we all have witnessed that there is a drastic shift of consumers from offline buying to online buying. I would totally agree with this fact that the day is not far when this sector will develop so much that it will eradicate all local shops and service centres. As per recent survey conducted by one of the leading market research firm it was concluded that around 65% of purchases were made online last year. This is evidence that reflects a drastic change in consumer behaviour & buying pattern. In recent times, focus of customers is more inclined towards ease and comfortless buyinig. Customers prefer buying products and services without stepping out of their home. Also currently IT sector is growing so rapidly that with just a click of button we can see features, price, colours & quality of product however describing same thing offline consume time and manpower and also can lead to confusions. If we compare advantages of online and offline buying, one of the major advantage will be getting reviews globally from users of that product. Also I would say COVID-19 is cherry on the cake for Ecommerce industry. Due to Social distancing norms & fear of COVID people are gradually moving towards online buying. Before COVID, younger population were involved much in online shopping but with COVID becoming our new life, customer base of ecommerce industry have increased & older generation is also now getting attracted towards buying online as it is safer. There are two basic pillars of Ecommerce industry which are IT & Logistics and with advancements in IT industry & strengthening of Logistics infrastructure online shopping would be the new normal. In turn we won't be seeing any local shops in cities and towns due to no demand or due to minimal demand. Maintaining shops involve various expenses such as rent, electricity, maintenance etc. and with decrease in demand it will be difficult for shopkeepers to earn profits hence resulting in shutting down. Also as we know that drones have entered in the market and this will be used by Ecommerce industry as their competitive advantage. This will convert standard delivery time from days to hours & minutes. Hence people will prefer to buy products in one click and getting it delivered at their doorstep. To conclude, I would say that shops are at verge of extension as per current industrial scenario. It's important that we protect our local shopkeepers by instead of shifting totally on online buying, we give preference to offline buying also purchase of daily use products.
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industry
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the most blooming
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industry
in business. With advancement in
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ecommerce
we all have witnessed that there is a drastic shift of consumers from offline
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buying
to
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online
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buying
. I would
totally
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agree
with this fact that the day is not far when this sector will develop
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so
much that it will eradicate all local
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shops
and service
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centres
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As
per recent survey conducted by one of the leading market research firm it
was concluded
that around 65% of
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purchases
were made
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online
last year. This is evidence that reflects a drastic
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change
in consumer
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behaviour
&
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buying
pattern. In recent times, focus of customers is more inclined towards
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ease
and comfortless
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buyinig
. Customers prefer
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buying
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products
and services without stepping out of their home.
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Also
currently
IT sector is growing
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so
rapidly
that with
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just
a click of button we can
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see
features, price,
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colours
& quality of
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product
however
describing same thing offline consume time and manpower and
also
can lead to confusions. If we compare advantages of
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online
and offline
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buying
, one of the major advantage will be getting reviews globally from users of that
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product
.
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Also
I would say COVID-19 is cherry on the cake for
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Ecommerce
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industry
. Due to Social distancing norms & fear of
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COVID
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people
are
gradually
moving towards
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online
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buying
.
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Before
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COVID
, younger population
were involved
much in
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online
shopping
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but
with
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COVID
becoming our new life, customer base of
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ecommerce
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industry
have increased & older generation is
also
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now
getting attracted towards
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buying
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online
as it is safer.

There are two basic pillars of
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Ecommerce
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industry
which are IT & Logistics and with advancements in IT
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industry
& strengthening of Logistics infrastructure
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online
shopping would be the new normal. In
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turn we
won't be seeing any local
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shops
in cities and towns due to no demand or due to minimal demand. Maintaining
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shops
involve various expenses such as rent, electricity, maintenance etc. and with decrease in demand it will be difficult for shopkeepers to earn profits
hence
resulting in shutting down.
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Also
as we know that drones have
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entered in the market
and this will be
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used
by
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Ecommerce
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industry
as their competitive advantage. This will convert standard delivery time from days to hours & minutes.
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Hence
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people
will prefer to
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buy
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products
in one click and getting it delivered at their doorstep.

To conclude
, I would say that
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shops
are at verge of extension as per
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current
industrial scenario. It's
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important
that we protect our local shopkeepers by
instead
of shifting
totally
on
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online
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buying
, we give preference to offline
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buying
also
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purchase
of daily
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use
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products
.
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IELTS essay THE GROWTH OF ONLINE SHOPPING WILL ONE DAY LEAD TO ALL SHOPS IN TOWNS & CITIES CLOSING.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
440 words
5.5
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