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Why happiness is considered very important? why is it difficult to define? What are the factors in achieving it? what are the reasons use your own ideas and experiences.

Why happiness is considered very important? why is it difficult to define? What are the factors in achieving it? what are the reasons use your own ideas and experiences. p5VYD
People who are happy are those who are having a positive outlooks of life. Rather, they were the one who were minimal problems that encountered. However, some says that being happy can avoid stress to our life. It is difficult to define to someone maybe because they did not yet experience the feeling of happiness in their life or I may say they were struggling that's why they were grasping of words how to define happiness. Firstly, you can achieve happiness when you know how to pray. Second, when the person know how to forgive. And lastly, if we know how to appreciate the blessings of Our Creator. Well, being happy is somewhat life is lighter. That you can share the positivity to everyone. Thus, Happiness is when you smile to some one you can easily share the happiness that you felt.
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or I may say they were struggling that's why they were grasping of words how to define
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Firstly
, you can achieve
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when you know how to pray. Second, when the person know how to forgive. And
lastly
, if we know how to appreciate the blessings of Our Creator. Well, being happy is somewhat
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life
is lighter. That you can share the positivity to everyone.
Thus
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Happiness
is when you smile to
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IELTS essay Why happiness is considered very important? why is it difficult to define? What are the factors in achieving it? what are the reasons use your own ideas and experiences.

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