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Should teachers, doctors and nurses should be paid more than celebrities and sports persons

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It's irrefutable that teachers, doctors, nurses, sports celebrities play an important role in healthcare, education, and entertainment. Everyone is serving society in their own ways. Teachers educate the individuals and future generations of the nation. Doctors and nurses treat patients and save lives.  india is a open market, everyone is paid according to demand and supply.  if we increase the salary of teachers and doctors, there are lakhs of doctors and teachers working in india. That Will put a huge burdon indian govt. expenditure. increased salary means increased cost of healthcare and education. best teachers and doctors are still earning handsome. barring few famous celecberities, sports celebrities are earning a lot less.
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IELTS essay Should teachers, doctors and nurses should be paid more than celebrities and sports persons

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