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WHY DO YOU WANT TO PURSUE YOUR DESIRED CAREER?

WHY DO YOU WANT TO PURSUE YOUR DESIRED CAREER? KydL6
You have a variety of careers to choose from. But not every career is right for you. If you choose the wrong career, you will choose the wrong job. This means you will be less motivated to go to work. You will also not be engaged at work. If you choose the right career, life will be better. You will land your dream job. Either, you will meet your financial needs. You will be motivated to do your job even on a Monday morning. So, you have many reasons to pursue your dream career. There are many reasons to pursue our desired career. First, when in your desired career, you will be motivated to remain committed. Facing challenges also becomes easier. Second, you will always meet high-performance standards. This is because you are talented and skilled. You are motivated enough to remain engaged. You can push yourself to achieve the best. Third, you become innovative. When you are motivated at work, you can come up with fresh ideas. In addition, you utilize your potential. When in your dream career, you get the opportunity to utilize your strengths. Moreover, you build your confidence. When you are sure of your right career path, your confidence grows. If there is one lesson in my career evolution, it would be to “test drive” different career paths, even if you don’t think you would enjoy them. You never know until you try. For example, if you get a part-time job at an ad agency and you don’t like it, that’s fine, move on. While college is a must, in my mind, it’s equally important to learn in the real world. Even with all the schooling and degrees, you won’t know if your chosen field is your true passion until you’re actually doing it on a day-to-day basis. In short, If you get enough lucky, you will be able to successfully pursue the job you have always dreamed of.
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, you will
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. This means you will be less
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to go to work. You will
also
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be engaged
at work. If you
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choose
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, life will be better. You will land your dream
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job
. Either, you will
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meet
your financial needs. You will be
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motivated
to do your
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job
even on a Monday morning.
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reasons to pursue your dream career.

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reasons to pursue our desired
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.
First
, when in your desired
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, you will be
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to remain committed. Facing challenges
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high-performance standards. This is
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to remain engaged. You can push yourself to achieve the best. Third, you become innovative. When you are
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at work, you can
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, you utilize your potential. When in your dream
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, you
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the opportunity to utilize your strengths.
Moreover
, you build your confidence. When you are sure of your right
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path, your confidence grows.

If there is one lesson in my
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evolution, it would be to “
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paths, even if you don’t
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at an ad agency and you don’t like it, that’s fine,
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on. While college is a
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, in my mind, it’s
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you have always dreamed of.
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IELTS essay WHY DO YOU WANT TO PURSUE YOUR DESIRED CAREER?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
323 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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