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Task 2 . Unhealthy lifestyle

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In these days, almost all of people have unhealthy lifestyle. It cause some illnesses or some problems too. A few people think about that is difficult to follow the daily healthy life. Others, do not believe that. It is easy for them. Most people too lazy, they do not want to do a few exercise in the morning. In particular, most of them are older people. If they do exercise regularly, over time they will find that their general health improves. Another problem is, so many adults utilise their own cars instead of walking. As a result of this, they get very little exercise. Next reason is, most people nowadays lead a sedentary lifestyle. For example, children play video games instead of doing sport activities and most adults also relax by watching television. Furthermore, an unhealthy diet can cause various health problems. Another huge reason is eating unhealthy meals as well as change eating time. Many people nowadays rely on fast food or pre-prepared meals. Some people hooked on to eat junk foods or ready-made meals. Because, they save the time as well as they are cheap to buy and easy to prepare. But, indeed these foods often contain too much fat, salt and sugar. In fact, eating so much junk food makes people overweight. It is absolutely essential not to eat junk food. Other problem is changing eating time. Among young school children is observed this action. Due to school lessons. But, they need to eat on time for being healthy. In conclusion, regular exercise is vital in maintaining a healthy body. If people want to be fit and healthy, they should give up to eat more unhealthy foods and lead to healthy life circle.
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people
have
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unhealthy
lifestyle. It
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cause
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illnesses or
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some
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problems
too. A few
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people
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think
about
that is
difficult to follow the daily
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healthy
life. Others, do not believe that. It is easy for them. Most
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people
too lazy, they do not want to do a few
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exercise
in the morning.
In particular
, most of them are older
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people
. If they do
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exercise
regularly
, over
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time
they will find that their general health
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improves
. Another
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problem
is,
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so
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many
adults
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utilise
their
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own
cars
instead
of walking.
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of this, they
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get
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very
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little
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exercise
.
Next
reason is, most
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people
nowadays lead a sedentary lifestyle.
For example
, children play video games
instead
of doing sport activities and most adults
also
relax by watching television.
Furthermore
, an
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unhealthy
diet can cause various health
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problems
. Another huge reason is
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eating
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unhealthy
meals
as well
as
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change
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eating
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time
.
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people
nowadays rely on
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fast
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food
or
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pre-prepared
meals.
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Some
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people
hooked on to
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eat
junk
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foods
or ready-made meals.
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Because
, they save the
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time
as well
as they are
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cheap
to
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buy
and easy to prepare.
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,
indeed
these
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foods
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often
contain too much
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fat
, salt and sugar. In fact,
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eating
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so
much junk
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food
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makes
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people
overweight. It is
absolutely
essential not to
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eat
junk
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food
. Other
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problem
is changing
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eating
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time
. Among young school children
is observed
this action. Due to school lessons.
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But
, they need to
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eat
on
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time
for being
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healthy
.
In conclusion
, regular
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exercise
is vital in maintaining a
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healthy
body. If
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people
want to
be fit
and
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healthy
, they should give up to
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eat
more
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unhealthy
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foods
and lead to
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healthy
life circle.
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IELTS essay Task 2 . Unhealthy lifestyle

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
286 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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