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Talk about a new sport or hobby you would like to take up. You should say: • what it is • how you would start it • why you have not started it yet and explain what help you would need.

Talk about a new sport or hobby you would like to take up. You should say: • what it is • how you would start it • why you have not started it yet and explain what help you would need. gbnJa
I’d love to try moto racing because it’s look so cool! I often watch tournaments on TV, the players look cool with their protective gear on body and the racing motor of them have a great engines. So I decided surely to try this sport in the future. It’s a sport about the speed and bravery. If you don’t have those two I think it’s very difficult to play, but I have both myself. Because I’ve not enough old and money yet, I can’t start to try it now. But just recently my friends and I were talking about this – and we came up with a plan to start it after some years. There’re any moto racing circuit in my city but in Ho Chi Minh city have some racetracks and when I go to university I will live there, it’ll be easier to fulfill my passion. Moto racing is not a society’s vices, it’s just a sport that help us cheery after stressfull working day. But when you abuse the road to race, then you are really breaking the law and will be fined. Before becoming the professional racer, I think I will join a team to learn from experience to improve and will practice regularly to get used to the track. I’ll probably need a loy of money to rent race motor and tracks to practice, I think I will get a part-time job when I go to college pr I’ll borrow some money from my parents, hoping they will not oppose this
I’d
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love
to try
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moto racing
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because
it’s look
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so
cool! I
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often
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watch
tournaments on TV, the players look cool with their protective gear on body and the racing motor of them have a great
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engines
.
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So
I decided
surely
to try this sport in the future. It’s a sport about the speed and bravery. If you don’t have those two I
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think
it’s
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very
difficult to play,
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but
I have both myself.
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Because
I’ve not
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enough
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old
and money
yet
, I can’t
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start
to try it
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now
.
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But
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just
recently my friends and I were talking about this
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–
and we came up with a plan to
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start
it after
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some
years. There’re any
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moto racing
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circuit
in my city
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but
in
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Ho Chi Minh city
have
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some
racetracks and when I go to university I will
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live
there, it’ll be easier to fulfill my passion.
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Moto racing
is not a society’s vices, it’s
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just
a sport that
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help
us cheery after
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stressfull
working day.
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But
when you abuse the road to race, then you are
really
breaking the law and will
be fined
.
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Before
becoming the professional racer, I
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think
I will
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join
a team to learn from experience to
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improve
and will practice
regularly
to
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get
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used
to the
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track
. I’ll
probably
need a
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loy
of money to rent race motor and
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tracks
to practice, I
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think
I will
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get
a part-time job when I go to college pr I’ll borrow
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some
money from my parents, hoping they will not oppose
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IELTS essay Talk about a new sport or hobby you would like to take up. You should say: • what it is • how you would start it • why you have not started it yet and explain what help you would need.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
255 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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