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Why do you want go to Erasmus

Why do you want go to Erasmus m5L98
Everybody has some dream. we think, . if we rich it, our life will be good. so. I want to go. I believe. If I go to my life will chance and I will feel better. Success is chancing people from to people. according to someone, the success can be get high mark or make a good meal. I believe catch the success. I am playing violin/ I have been play 3 years and I remember when I played sing in the first time. I felt amazing because I studied a lot. I said that is the success. Last June, I decided to learn English and first time I just study 15 minutes for a day. Then I tried to improve my speaking writing and listening. I asked myself ‘why l learn English. The answer is too simple, for improve myself. I related to art. I learn English. I think if you how much willing to different of the life. It means success is coming Finally, i want to go abroad for a better life.
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high mark or
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meal. I believe catch the success.

I am playing violin/ I have been play 3 years and I remember when I played sing in the
first
time.
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felt amazing
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I studied a lot.
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said
that is
the
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success
. Last June, I decided to learn English and
first
time I
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study 15 minutes for a day. Then I tried to
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my speaking writing and listening. I asked myself ‘why l learn English. The answer is too simple, for
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improve
myself. I related to art. I learn English.
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I
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if you how much willing to
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is coming
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want to go abroad for a better
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IELTS essay Why do you want go to Erasmus

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
175 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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