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Where would you like to read your news on internet or newspaper? Why? Nowadays people are very well informed than they were before. Some people prefer to read the latest news on newspaper rather than on Internet. While others argue that Internet is one o v.2

Where would you like to read your news on internet or newspaper? Why? Nowadays people are very well informed than they were before. Some people prefer to read the latest news on newspaper rather than on Internet. While others argue that Internet is one o v. 2
Where would you like to read your news on internet or newspaper? Why? Nowadays people are very well informed than they were before. Some people prefer to read the latest news on newspaper rather than on Internet. While others argue that Internet is one of the best options to get informed. Personally, I think that the Internet is one of the best options that our generation have chance to use it in different ways. One of the reasons why I would prefer Internet vs Magasins is because we can inform ourselves with the latest news very quick and everywhere we are. We just need a mobile device and access to Internet and we are good to use it, without putting to much effort into it. Even though people may feel that it is better to not know everything what is happening because it might be disturbing. Still it is very important for people to know what is going on in real time around them or even internationally. If we don’t know what is happening we might miss a lot of important news that we should know. Basically, it is very important to be informed and smart devices makes it easy for us to do that. The second reason is that when we use internet we have also the chance to watch the video attached to the news. We can watch live news, not just reading them. With the development of the technology our lifestyle is changed in all aspects. Also, people that have disabilities like, problems with the vision they could get informed just by listening the news. This service is very valuable for them and all other people in general. Even though some people prefer to read newspapers instead, the recent studies have shown that the number of people that are using Internet to inform themselves is dramatically increased. That’s why, using Internet we have the opportunity to read and listen the news. Summing up, I believe that Internet is one of the resources that is very convenient and more sophisticated than other resources.
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on internet or newspaper? Why?

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informed
than they were
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before
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people
prefer to
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read
the latest
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news
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than on Internet.
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others argue that Internet is one of the best options to
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informed
.
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, I
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think
that the Internet is one of the best options that our generation have chance to
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use
it in
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different
ways.

One of the reasons why I would prefer Internet vs
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is
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because
we can inform ourselves with the latest
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news
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very
quick and everywhere we are. We
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just
need a mobile device and access to
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Internet and
we are
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good
to
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it, without putting
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much effort into it.
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people
may feel that it is better to not know everything what is happening
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because
it might be disturbing.
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Still
it is
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very
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important
for
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people
to know what is going on in real time around them or even
internationally
.
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If
we don’t know what is happening we might miss
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a lot of
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important
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news
that we should know.

Basically
, it is
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very
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important
to be
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informed
and smart devices
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makes
it easy for us to do that.

The second reason is that when we
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use
internet we have
also
the chance to
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watch
the video attached to the
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news
. We can
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watch
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live
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news
, not
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just
reading them. With the development of the technology our lifestyle is
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changed
in all aspects.
Also
,
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people
that have disabilities like, problems with the vision they could
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get
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informed
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just
by listening the
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news
. This service is
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very
valuable for them and all other
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people
in general
.
Even though
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some
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people
prefer to
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read
newspapers
instead
, the recent studies have shown that the number of
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people
that are using Internet to inform themselves is
dramatically
increased.

That’s why, using Internet we have the opportunity to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
read
and listen the news.

Summing up, I believe that Internet is one of the resources
that is
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very
convenient and more sophisticated than other resources.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay Where would you like to read your news on internet or newspaper? Why? Nowadays people are very well informed than they were before. Some people prefer to read the latest news on newspaper rather than on Internet. While others argue that Internet is one o v. 2

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
345 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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