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why do people want to be famous

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There are lots of benefit for being a famous person. People think that by being famous they will be recognize and they can get a lot of income from endorsement or advertising a product. By being famous they will have a chance to step up their life and also meet other famous people. Nowadays, there are lots of famous people who have a bad behavior. Their attitude is caused by the factors of fame and richness. Those famous people will look down on the others and because of their own attitude the public will start hating on them.
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person.
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that by being
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they will be
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recognize and
they can
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a lot of
income from endorsement or advertising a product. By being
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famous
they will have a chance to step up their life and
also
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meet
other
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famous
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people
. Nowadays, there are lots of
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famous
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people
who have a
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bad
behavior. Their attitude
is caused
by the factors of fame and richness. Those
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famous
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people
will look down on the others and
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because
of their
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IELTS essay why do people want to be famous

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
98 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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