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to inform us about your name and its relationship to your identity in an interesting way

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Do you know the movie about Qianlong Emperor? My parents love to watch that movie from the old days, my dad loves the movie. Qianlong inspired my dad to name me Long. Two days ago, my dad told me many stories about his life, his family, how he married my mom, and how he named me. I enjoy hearing these stories, it was 1 hour long. It was the best story I had heard from my dad. He tells me my name means golden dragon, dragon of the king in Chinese. He named me Truong Hoang Long for the reason that he wanted me to become strong, a gentleman who is respected by the whole society. He also wants me to have respect from society, intelligent, diligent, and conscientious like Qianlong. I’ve had more nicknames than the number of friends I have! Long, Long da đen, Long, Mập, Kevin to name just a few! I also have a nickname called Heo, it means Pig in English. My name is Pig because when I was at elementary school, I ate so much, and I was so lazy, then my sister started to call me by that nickname, now my friends are starting to call me by that nickname as well. When I was 9 year olds, I went to an international school. I have been learning in an international school for nearly 5 years now. On the very first day of my school, I was very confused by people talking to me with a very fast English tempo but everyone is Vietnamese. All of those students have an English nickname, I nearly changed my name to Kevin because I wanted to be like them, but unfortunately, I have to step above the reason that I want to be unique with my name in the school. I noticed when I was a kid everyone kept calling me Qianlong, I don’t understand what it means and why people call me that. As i’m growing up people call me Long and not Qianlong anymore, it is also the moment I know i'm growing up. Ages ago, there are a legend name Lý Tiểu Long who people know as Bruce Lee. He is a Hong Kong American martial artist, film actor, he was really successful until he passed away. Surprisingly, his name is the same as mine. Therefore, I hope I will be confident, successful, and brave like him. Since grade 3, my friends have always called me Thành Long - also known as Jackie Chan. They told me that “I called you with this name because of how active you are, happy you are, and how you always want to try your best to beat something! . ” I enjoy it when they refer to me by a nickname since that is something only people who like you would do. Regardless of whether you like your nickname or not, if the people you care about call you by that name, you will eventually come to like it. Those names will be the last remembrance of the pleasant times you shared with them when they are no longer in your life. If I alter my name solely to blend in with various cultures around the world. Then my parents' first present to me would be completely useless. Since I'm aware of the true meaning of my name. I recognized that I shouldn't change my name since I consider it to be one of the most precious gifts my parents gave me when I was a baby, and my name is where my parents' trusts stay. They believe me to be a gentleman, a good person who gets respected by the whole society.
Do you know the movie about
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Qianlong
Emperor? My parents
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watch
that movie from the
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days, my
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dad
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loves
the movie.
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Qianlong
inspired my
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dad
to
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name
me
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Long
. Two days ago, my
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dad
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told
me
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many
stories about his life, his family, how he married my mom, and how he named me. I enjoy hearing these stories, it was 1 hour
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long
. It was the best story I had heard from my
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dad
. He
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tells
me my
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name
means golden dragon, dragon of the king in Chinese. He named me
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Truong
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Hoang
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Long
for the reason that he wanted me to become strong, a gentleman
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who
is respected
by the whole society.
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He
also
wants me to have respect from society, intelligent, diligent, and conscientious like
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Qianlong
.

I’ve had more
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nicknames
than the number of friends I have!
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Long
,
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Long
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da
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đen
,
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Long
,
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Mập
, Kevin to
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name
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just
a few! I
also
have a
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nickname
called
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Heo
, it means Pig in English. My
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name
is Pig
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because
when I was at elementary
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school
, I ate
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so
much, and I was
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so
lazy, then my sister
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started
to
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call
me by that
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nickname
,
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now
my friends are starting to
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call
me by that
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nickname
as well
.

When I was
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9 year olds
, I went to an international
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school
. I have been learning in an international
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school
for
nearly
5 years
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now
. On the
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very
first
day of my
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school
, I was
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very
confused by
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people
talking to me with a
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very
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fast
English tempo
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but
everyone is Vietnamese. All of those students have an English
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nickname
, I
nearly
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changed
my
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name
to Kevin
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because
I wanted to be like them,
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but
unfortunately, I
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have to
step above the reason that I want to be unique with my
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name
in the school.

I noticed when I was a kid everyone
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kept
calling me
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Qianlong
, I don’t understand what it means and why
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people
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call
me that. As
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i’m
growing up
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people
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call
me
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Long
and not
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Qianlong
anymore, it is
also
the moment I know
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i'm
growing up. Ages ago, there are a legend
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name
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Lý
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Tiểu
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Long
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who
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people
know as Bruce Lee. He is a Hong Kong American martial artist, film actor, he was
really
successful until he passed away.
Surprisingly
, his
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name
is the same as mine.
Therefore
, I hope I will be confident, successful, and brave like him.

Since grade 3, my friends have always called me
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Thành
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Long
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
also
known as Jackie Chan. They
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told
me that “I called you with this
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name
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because
of how active you are, happy you are, and how you always want to try your best to beat something!
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
”

I enjoy it when they refer to me by a
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nickname
since
that is
something
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only
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people
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who
like you would do. Regardless of whether you like your
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nickname
or not, if the
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people
you care about
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call
you by that
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name
, you will
eventually
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come
to like it. Those
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names
will be the last remembrance of the pleasant times you shared with them when they are no longer in your life.

“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
I alter my
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name
solely
to blend in with various cultures around the world. Then my parents'
first
present to me would be completely useless.
“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
I'm aware of the true meaning of my
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name
. I recognized that I shouldn't
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change
my
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name
since I consider it to be one of the most precious gifts my parents gave me when I was a baby, and my
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name
is where my parents' trusts stay. They believe me to be a gentleman, a
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good
person
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who
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gets
respected by the whole society.
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IELTS essay to inform us about your name and its relationship to your identity in an interesting way

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
617 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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