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Why do people not play sports?

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People have a limited amount of usable hours per day to spend on doing things, and most people also have a limited amount of money to spend. These two things require for people to decide which things they value the most to divert their resources towards. If someone doesn’t really enjoy sports, it tends to be pretty low on the list. There are also issues with injuries as well - sports, regardless of which kind, have a fairly high chance of getting harmed from such. Many sports, even ones you wouldn’t expect, can lead to serious life-threatening injuries, which a lot of people don’t consider to be worth the risk. As people age, they also tend to be less interested in sports since their bodies typically aren’t as capable of doing such without a great deal of pain. Tennis, golf and other low-intensity sports are a bit more popular, but again the other factors already listed can discourage people from bothering to play them. Personally, I simply don’t have the time to invest in sports of any kind; I would much rather spend any time that would be spent on physical activity instead on mental activity due to personal preference.
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people
also
have a limited amount of money to spend. These two things require for
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people
to decide which things they value the most to divert their resources towards.

If someone doesn’t
really
enjoy
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sports
, it tends to be pretty low on the list.

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also
issues with injuries
as well
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sports
, regardless of which kind, have a
fairly
high chance of getting harmed from such.
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Many
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sports
, even ones you wouldn’t
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, can lead to serious life-threatening injuries, which
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a lot of
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people
don’t consider to be worth the
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.

As
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people
age, they
also
tend to be less interested in
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sports
since their bodies
typically
aren’t as capable of doing such without a great deal of pain. Tennis, golf and other low-intensity
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sports
are a bit more popular,
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but
again the other factors already listed can discourage
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people
from bothering to play them.

Personally
, I
simply
don’t have the time to invest in
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sports
of any kind; I would much
rather
spend any time that would
be spent
on physical activity
instead
on mental activity due to personal preference.
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IELTS essay Why do people not play sports?

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200 words
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