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why are sugary drinks popular?

why are sugary drinks popular? Y2r15
First, beverage companies often pour generous budgets into marketing to get publicity for their products. For example, many firms pay extravagant amounts of money for superstars to endorse in its commercials, which influence consumers, especially youngsters, to purchase their products. Second, the lack of health risks’ understanding of consumers can attribute to the aforementioned issue. To be more specific, although these drinks usually contain highly addictive ingredients like caffeine, making users to be addicted unconsciously and leading to numerous health-related problems such as obesity, tooth decay and cardiovascular diseases, people tend to overlook these detrimental effects and use these drinks in lieu of juices
First
, beverage
companies
often
pour generous budgets into marketing to
get
publicity for their products.
For example
,
many
firms pay extravagant amounts of money for superstars to endorse in its commercials, which influence consumers,
especially
youngsters, to
purchase
their products. Second, the lack of health
risks
’ understanding of consumers can attribute to the aforementioned issue. To be more specific, although these drinks
usually
contain
highly
addictive ingredients like caffeine, making users to
be addicted
unconsciously
and leading to numerous health-related problems such as obesity, tooth decay and cardiovascular diseases,
people
tend to overlook these detrimental effects and
use
these drinks in lieu of
juices
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IELTS essay why are sugary drinks popular?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
103 words
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