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a diamond tells you that a decision to a question needs to be made. These are very often yes/no answer but can include other information as well

a diamond tells you that a decision to a question needs to be made. These are very often yes/no answer but can include other information as well XVdNw
The illustration presents an overview of the key stage involved in borrowing a book with a library card. The whole manufacturing process starts when people have a desire to read books and then need to borrow books from a library. Everyone has to go through a card check step before entering the library which results in two situations for each member. As long as they enter without a card, they should find it again and that means they will not be able to borrow the book. On the other hand, for those who have access to a library card, they can go to the library where they can find the books they need. Subsequently, a penultimate stage which is book signed out is carried out to identify the information of books. It then leads to the final stage of the process at which point the borrowers can pick up their books. All of the various phases involved have been completed in the process of getting books from the library.
The illustration presents an overview of the key stage involved in borrowing a
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book
with a library card.

The whole manufacturing process
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have a desire to read
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books
and then need to borrow
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
from a library. Everyone
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has to
go through a card
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
step
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before
entering the library which results in two situations for each member. As long as they enter without a card, they should find it again and that means they will not be able to borrow the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
.
On the other hand
, for those who have access to a library card, they can go to the library where they can find the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
they need.
Subsequently
, a penultimate stage which is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
signed out
is carried
out to identify the information of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
. It then leads to the final stage of the process at which point the borrowers can pick up their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
.
Consider using "all the".
All of the
various phases involved have
been completed
in the process of getting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
from the library.
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IELTS essay a diamond tells you that a decision to a question needs to be made. These are very often yes/no answer but can include other information as well

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
169 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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