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Who is a person you think you have impacted in your life  What impact have you had on the person, and how.

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There have been a lot of people who have made an impact in my life including my parents but one person who has influenced my values, beliefs, and force to live in work as a person is my teacher. He is not only my teacher but also like my father because I do well in my job and daily life on his instruction.  I have learned valuable lessons from my teacher, in particular, he is hard working and always learns something. When I graduated, I did not know what to do. I went to my teacher training course. At that time I did not understand the lecture, so the teacher noticed me. He patiently explained the lessons and taught them not only during the training but also outside. As a result, after I successfully completed the exam with good marks, my teacher gave me a chance for my first job. But Unfortunately I can not do job well and had poor relationships with people. I quit my job because  I was depressed.  At that time the teacher helped me to find a new job and I was living under the guidance of my teacher. Today I am the manager of a large company, and my teacher passed away early. For the next question, I have had an impact on the person who is my elder sister.  Her husband left her with two kids because of a misunderstanding about my sister. She felt like her life was about to end, and was falling apart. She contacted me and explained all her problems. I encouraged my sister not to give up on life easily and explain to my sister's husband that she had done nothing wrong. In just a day, her husband came back to his home with much love and apologized for all the pain he has brought to the family.
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who have made an impact in my
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including my parents
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one person who has influenced my values, beliefs, and force to
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live
in work as a person is my
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teacher
. He is not
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only
my
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teacher
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but
also
like my father
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because
I do well in my
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job
and daily
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life
on his instruction.  I have learned valuable lessons from my
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teacher
,
in particular
, he is
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hard working
and always learns something. When I graduated, I did not know what to do. I went to my
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teacher
training course. At that time I did not understand the lecture,
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so
the
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teacher
noticed me. He
patiently
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explained
the lessons and taught them not
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only
during the training
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but
also
outside.
As a result
, after I
successfully
completed the exam with
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good
marks, my
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gave me a chance for my
first
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job
.
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Unfortunately I can not do
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well and had poor relationships with
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people
. I quit my
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job
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because
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I
was depressed
.  At that time the
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teacher
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helped me to find
a new
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job and
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.
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Today
I am the manager of a large
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, and my
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passed away early.

For the
next
question, I have had an impact on the person who is my elder sister.  Her husband
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left
 her with two kids
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because
of a misunderstanding about my sister. She felt like her
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life
was about to
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end
, and was falling apart. She contacted me and
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explained
all her problems. I encouraged my sister not to give up on
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life
easily
and
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explain
to my sister's husband that she had done nothing
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wrong
. In
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just
a day, her husband came back to his home with much
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love
and apologized for all the pain he has brought to the family.
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IELTS essay Who is a person you think you have impacted in your life What impact have you had on the person, and how.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
306 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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