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q2Some people prefer to learn information by watching television. Others prefer to learn by reading books. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer v.1

q2Some people prefer to learn information by watching television. Others prefer to learn by reading books. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer v. 1
In the world, many countries have single-sex schools and mixed-sex schools and parents can choose to send their children in any of them. It is thought by some that children who study in gender specific schools face difficulties in the future. I completely agree with this statement. Firstly, students would be reluctant to the opposite sex as they would be uncomfortable in talking to or working with them. This, in turn, can put an adverse effect on their overall development. For instance, a study conducted by the University of Cambridge revealed that children taught in segregated schools find it difficult to communicate with their opposite sex. Secondly, if boys and girls are taught in separate schools, they may have prejudiced thoughts for their counterparts due to misunderstanding or lack of mutual understanding. In addition, they will lack in availing the opportunity to share or grab ideas from each other if taught in separate schools. Since boys and girls have different thinking and attitude to life, they can learn many things from each other, however, the are deprive of this learning in gender based schooling. For example, most girls tend to be attentive and sincere their studies and boys, on the other hand, have more liveliness. The can inculcate different personality aspects from each other. In conclusion, I reiterate that students who study are not better prepared for the real world in single gender schools. They would be little confident in front of their opposite sex and unable to understand each other.
In the world,
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many
countries have single-sex
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schools
and mixed-sex
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schools
and parents can choose to
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send
their children in any of them. It is
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thought
by
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some
that children who
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study
in
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gender specific
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schools
face difficulties in the future. I completely
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agree
with this statement.

Firstly
, students would be reluctant to the opposite sex as they would be uncomfortable in talking to or working with them. This, in turn, can put an adverse effect on their
overall
development.
For instance
, a
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study
conducted by the University of Cambridge revealed that children taught in segregated
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schools
find it difficult to communicate with their opposite sex.
Secondly
, if boys and girls
are taught
in separate
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schools
, they may have prejudiced thoughts for their counterparts due to misunderstanding or lack of mutual understanding.

In addition
, they will lack in availing the opportunity to share or grab
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ideas
from each
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other
if taught in separate
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schools
. Since boys and girls have
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different
thinking and attitude to life, they can learn
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many
things from each
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other
,
however
,
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the are
deprive of this learning in gender based schooling.
For example
, most girls tend to be attentive and sincere their
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studies
and boys, on the
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other
hand, have more liveliness. The can inculcate
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
personality aspects from each other.

In conclusion
, I reiterate that students who
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study
are not better prepared for the real world in single gender
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schools
. They would be
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little
confident in front of their opposite sex and unable to understand each
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other
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay q2Some people prefer to learn information by watching television. Others prefer to learn by reading books. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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