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While it is sometimes thought that prison is the best place for criminals, others believe that there are better ways to deal with them. What is your opinion? v.8

While it is sometimes thought that prison is the best place for criminals, others believe that there are better ways to deal with them. What is your opinion? v. 8
There is no doubt that to save the general public from offenders is to keep them in prison. However, some people agree and others argue that approach some other ways. In my opinion, lockup is specifically designed for criminals. To begin with, some people agree to keep the criminals in prison because there they will be kept under the authority of the police department. In this way, there will be no chance to run away. Moreover, some gangsters are highly professionals. For instance, the robber, they are extensively expert to their occupation and have weapons too. They can do robbery of any house, banks and other places. They can also harm the individual life if they fail to prescribed plan. Therefore, to keep the criminals in jail is public safety. On the other hand, some people argue that other ways are better to deal with them. For example, if lawbreakers are kept in the closed Room in a house in the middle of the city where the general public live. This means we are giving them a chance to run away and do start their work again and harm individual life. Because they have weapons. Everyone loves their life and family. Therefore, a good decision is a lockup for all the offenders. To conclude, criminals are the masterminds and the General Public is innocent. In order to save the life of civilization keep the gangsters in the prison under the authority of police where even they cannot think of any crime.
There is no doubt that to save the general
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public
from offenders is to
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keep
them in prison.
However
,
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some
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people
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agree
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and others
argue that approach
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some
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other
ways. In my opinion, lockup is
specifically
designed for criminals.

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begin
with,
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some
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people
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agree
to
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keep
the criminals in prison
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because
there they will be
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kept
under the authority of the police department. In this way, there will be no chance to run away.
Moreover
,
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some
gangsters are
highly
professionals.
For instance
, the robber, they are
extensively
expert to their occupation and have weapons too. They can do robbery of any
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house
, banks and
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other
places. They can
also
harm the individual
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life
if they fail to prescribed plan.
Therefore
, to
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keep
the criminals in jail is
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public
safety.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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people
argue that
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other
ways are better to deal with them.
For example
, if lawbreakers are
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kept
in the closed Room in a
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house
in the middle of the city where the general
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public
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live
. This means we are giving them a chance to run away and do
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start
their work again and harm individual
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life
.
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Because
they have weapons. Everyone
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loves
their
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life
and family.
Therefore
, a
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good
decision is a lockup for all the offenders.

To conclude
, criminals are the masterminds and the General
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Public
is innocent. In order to save the
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life
of civilization
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keep
the gangsters in the prison under the authority of police where even they cannot
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think
of any crime.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay While it is sometimes thought that prison is the best place for criminals, others believe that there are better ways to deal with them. What is your opinion? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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