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Nowadays many parents believe that children’s use of tablets or computers would be good for their future academic careers. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a belief? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples. v.2

Nowadays many parents believe that children’s use of tablets or computers would be good for their future academic careers. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a belief? v. 2
In recent years, the usage of tablets and computers have increased rapidly. This has become a trend more than a necessity. This essay chalks out the pros and cons of children using tablets or computers for their academic careers. Internet is such a powerful resource today that it provides any information we need. There are a number of benefits when it comes to children using a Tablet or a Computer. Firstly, children in schools are able to complete their project assignments if they have access to Internet through these electronics. Secondly, students can download different mobile apps that help them in understanding their academic subjects better. Lastly, there are a number of resources available to bring awareness about children’s career options that they can research and choose from. Whilst the use of these electronic items is advantageous, it is often found that the children misuse the usage if not kept under proper supervision. When left unattended with such gadgets, children may try to access A-rated movies/websites. They may also be found learning about alcohol and drugs usage at a very early stage when they don’t understand what is good and bad for them. Children may take the wrong path and involve themselves in such illegal activities soon before their parents realize what caused it. Lastly, they may also get addicted to tablets and may use it to an extent where they stop all the physical activities and prefer being indoors. Therefore, children need to be explained the importance of using gadgets so its usage is never exploited. Parents need to be aware of what their children are working on and may need to put appropriate parental locks in case they find weird activities before handing over these gadgets to their kids.
In recent years, the
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usage
of tablets and computers have increased
rapidly
. This has become a trend more than a necessity. This essay chalks out the pros and cons of
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children
using tablets or computers for their academic careers.

Internet is such a powerful resource
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today
that it provides any information we
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need
. There are a number of benefits when it
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comes
to
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children
using a Tablet or a Computer.
Firstly
,
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children
in schools are able to complete their project assignments if they have access to Internet through these electronics.
Secondly
, students can download
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different
mobile apps that
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help
them in understanding their academic subjects better.
Lastly
, there are a number of resources available to bring awareness about
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children’s
career options that they can research and choose from.

Whilst the
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use
of these electronic items is advantageous, it is
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often
found that the
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children
misuse the
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usage
if not
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kept
under proper supervision. When
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left
unattended with such gadgets,
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children
may try to access A-rated movies/websites. They may
also
be found
learning about alcohol and drugs
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usage
at a
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very
early stage when they don’t understand what is
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good
and
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bad
for them.
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Children
may take the
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wrong
path and involve themselves in such illegal activities
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soon
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before
their parents realize what caused it.
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, they may
also
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get
addicted to tablets and may
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use
it to an extent where they
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stop
all the physical activities and prefer being indoors.

Therefore
,
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children
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need
to be
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explained
the importance of using gadgets
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so
its
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usage
is never exploited. Parents
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need
to be aware of what their
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children
are working on and may
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need
to put appropriate parental locks in case they find weird activities
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before
handing over these gadgets to their kids.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays many parents believe that children’s use of tablets or computers would be good for their future academic careers. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a belief? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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