Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people prefer to spend time with one or two close friends. Others choose to spend time with a large number of friends. Compare the advantages of each choice. Which of these two ways of spending time do you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to v.3

Some people prefer to spend time with one or two close friends. Others choose to spend time with a large number of friends. Compare the advantages of each choice. Which of these two ways of spending time do you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to v. 3
Some people prefer to spend time with a large number of friends, while some prefer to spend time with one or two friends. There are both advantages and disadvantages for both, but it seems to me that spending time with close friends better for me. Close friends share similar interests understand each other, share their secrets and support each other in difficulties and emergencies. Firstly, I would rather to spend time with my friend because we share same interests; therefore, it is more fun and enjoyable to spend time people that are similar to me. For instance, we both enjoy playing football, or go to club for dancing and drinking or play video games. I can not get close and have fun with people who are different from me, because we do not understand each other and one may do something that bothers or insults the other person. For example, in one of our high school parties, in which so many students were invited, I made a raillery. Some really enjoyed and we became good friend, however, some seemed to be annoyed significantly. Secondly, another reason why I prefer to spend time with close friends is that we completely understand each other. I can easily talk to my close friend and he or she quickly understands my point. We will do any endeavors to solve each other’s problems. For example, when I was at university, I had problems with my family. I talked to one of my close friends about it, and then they counseled me and recommended a good solution for my problems. I felt very happy after their substantial support. What’s more, close friend can share some secrets. You can talk about your personal life in front of a large number of people. Finally, I do not like to spend time with a large number of people because sometimes I need to compromise my demands. I am tired of compromising my demands. For example, I might decide to sit and watch people dancing in a party and relax, but some people force me to come and join us in dancing. I do not feel like dancing but I may go and dance, because they may think I have personal problems with them or I am not friendly or social. To sum up, I prefer to spend time with one or two close friend for many reasons. I feel better when I am with friends who are similar to me and understand each other. Close friends can support you with your problems and you can talk about your secrets and personal problems.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prefer
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
with
Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use "many" or "numerous"
a large number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
, while
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prefer
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
with one or two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
. There are both advantages and disadvantages for both,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it seems to me that spending
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
close
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
better for me.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Close
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
share
similar interests
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
understand
each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
share
their secrets and support each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
in difficulties and emergencies.

Firstly
, I would
rather
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
with my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
we
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
share
same interests;
therefore
, it is more fun and enjoyable to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
that are similar to me.
For instance
, we both enjoy playing football, or go to club for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dancing
and drinking or play video games. I can not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
close
and have fun with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
from me,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
we do not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
understand
each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
and one may do something that bothers or insults the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
person.
For example
, in one of our high school parties, in which
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
students
were invited
, I made a raillery.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
really
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
enjoyed and
we became
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
,
however
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
seemed to
be annoyed
significantly
.

Secondly
, another reason why I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prefer
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
close
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
is that we completely
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
understand
each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
. I can
easily
talk to my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
close
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
friend and
he or she
quickly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
understands
my point. We will do any endeavors to solve each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
.
For example
, when I was at university, I had
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
with my family. I talked to one of my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
close
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
about it, and then they counseled me and recommended a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
solution for my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
. I felt
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
happy after their substantial support. What’s more,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
close
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
share
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
secrets. You can talk about your personal life in front of
Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use "many" or "numerous"
a large number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

Finally
, I do not like to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
with
Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use "many" or "numerous"
a large number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
I need to compromise my demands. I
am tired
of compromising my demands.
For example
, I might decide to sit and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dancing
Unless you mean "in a political party," the usual preposition for a party is "at." Did you mean, "at a party"?
in a party
and relax,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
force me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
us in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dancing
. I do not feel like
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dancing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I may go and dance,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
I have personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
with
Use a comma before 'or' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
them or
I am not friendly or social.

To sum up, I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prefer
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
with one or two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
close
Possible agreement error. The noun 'friend' seems to be countable, so consider using: "friends".
friend
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
reasons. I feel better when I am with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
who are similar to me and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
understand
each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Close
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
can support you with your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
and you can talk about your secrets and personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
73Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend time with one or two close friends. Others choose to spend time with a large number of friends. Compare the advantages of each choice. Which of these two ways of spending time do you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
433 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts