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Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice v.9

Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice v. 9
A larger population of the youth seems to be working for software/hardware companies for various factors. This essay will chalk out the benefits and bane of both the sides. Today, working for a multinational company, for example Wipro or Philips, is advantageous in many ways. Firstly, there is a fixed amount of pay-package that is credited at the end of every month. No person working for an MNC has to be worried about the usual cost cutting that happens at other smaller jobs. Secondly, due to high revenues and profit margins that these companies have, employees are given multiple facilities like air-conditioned cabins, desks, chairs, laptops, insurance benefits, etc. without spending a single penny from their own pocket. Whilst MNCs provide multiple benefits, working for a start-up has its own perks. There is a great exposure to learning new technologies and skills, since there are lesser clients, which in turn leads to less pressure of the deadlines. Also, working professionals may be allowed to have flexible timings and may not need to work extra hours, which is not possible in large scale companies. The competition is relatively less and hence career growth could be assured in the smaller firms. However, due to less number of clients, the monthly payments may need to be compromised in the initial stages of the startup. Travelling on business purpose is another drawback for people who would love to travel. The startups may not have the budget to accommodate such expenses for their employees. There is also a serious risk of losing jobs if the startups or smaller companies are unable to do well. In my opinion, both large and small companies are somewhat beneficial if one is ready use those at their best. Although, I would be a bit inclined towards working for a larger company as they would guarantee job security, which has a lesser probability in the latter scenario.
A larger population of the youth seems to be
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working
for software/hardware
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companies
for various factors. This essay will chalk out the benefits and bane of both the sides.

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Today
,
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working
for a multinational
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company
,
for example
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Wipro
or Philips, is advantageous in
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many
ways.
Firstly
, there is a
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fixed
amount of pay-package that
is credited
at the
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end
of every month. No person
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working
for an
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MNC
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has to
be worried
about the usual
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cost cutting
that happens at other smaller jobs.
Secondly
, due to high revenues and profit margins that these
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companies
have, employees are
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given
multiple facilities like air-conditioned cabins, desks, chairs, laptops, insurance benefits, etc. without spending a single penny from their
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own
pocket.

Whilst
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MNCs
provide multiple benefits,
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working
for a
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start
-up has its
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own
perks. There is a great exposure to learning new technologies and
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skills
, since there are lesser clients, which in turn leads to less pressure of the deadlines.
Also
,
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working
professionals may be
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allowed
to have flexible timings and may not need to work extra hours, which is not possible in large scale
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companies
. The competition is
relatively
less and
hence
career growth could
be assured
in the smaller firms.
However
, due to less number of clients, the monthly payments may need to
be compromised
in the initial stages of the startup. Travelling on business purpose is another drawback for
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people
who would
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love
to travel. The startups may not have the budget to accommodate such expenses for their employees. There is
also
a serious
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risk
of losing jobs if the startups or smaller
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companies
are unable to do well.

In my opinion, both large and
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small
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companies
are somewhat beneficial if one is ready
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use
those at their best. Although, I would be a bit inclined towards
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working
for a larger
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company
as they would guarantee job security, which has a lesser probability in the latter scenario.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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