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Some people prefer to spend time with one or two close friends. Others choose to spend time with a large number of friends. Compare the advantages of each choice. Which of these two ways of spending time do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support y v.1

Some people prefer to spend time with one or two close friends. Others choose to spend time with a large number of friends. Compare the advantages of each choice. Which of these two ways of spending time do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support y v. 1
Demand for new houses has significantly increased in many areas. This has started a new debate since countryside might be the only place which has enough land available to build these homes. While some people believe that protecting the existing countryside is essential rather than using it to construct new buildings, others might be against this notion. In my opinion, the argument regarding the protection of rural land is completely valid as building house there will lead to loss of agricultural land and trees. Construction of houses in the countryside will reduce available agricultural land. Even though there is still plenty of land available for growing fruits and vegetables at the moment, this might be not the case if these areas are not protected. According to a recent study published online, a total 10 percent agricultural land across the world has severely been affected by the urbanization factor in the last five years, which has made it harder for many countries to meet rising demands of fresh products they produce. Therefore, in order to save the available agricultural land, building homes in the countryside should be discouraged. Moreover, utilizing countryside space for living purposes can result in the loss of trees. In order to build houses in rural areas, most of the trees will need to be cleared; which can be very harmful for the environment. For instance, in a similar project undertaken by Pakistani authorities recently in order to provide public housing, almost sixteen thousand trees were removed. As it is a widely known fact that tree removal directly affect our environment causing global warming, countryside construction should not be allowed in any case. In conclusion, many people believe that the land available in the countryside could be used for housing purposes. However, in my opinion, these areas are a great source of agriculture and trees needing protection and care.
Demand for new
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has
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increased in
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many
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areas
. This has
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started
a new debate since
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countryside
might be the
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only
place which has
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enough
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land
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available
to build these homes. While
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some
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people
believe that protecting the existing
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countryside
is essential
rather
than using it to construct new buildings, others might be against this notion. In my opinion, the argument regarding the protection of rural
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land
is completely valid as building
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house
there will lead to loss of
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agricultural
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land
and trees.

Construction of
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houses
in the
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countryside
will
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reduce
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available
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agricultural
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land
.
Even though
there is
still
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plenty
of
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land
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available
for growing fruits and vegetables at the moment, this might be not the case if these
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areas
are not protected. According to a recent study published online, a total 10 percent
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agricultural
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land
across the world has
severely
been
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affected
by the urbanization factor in the last five years, which has made it harder for
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many
countries to
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meet
rising demands of fresh products they produce.
Therefore
, in order to save the
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available
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agricultural
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land
, building homes in the
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countryside
should
be discouraged
.

Moreover
, utilizing
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countryside
space for living purposes can result in the loss of
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trees
. In order to build
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houses
in rural
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areas
, most of the
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trees
will need to
be cleared
; which can be
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very
harmful for the environment.
For instance
, in a similar project undertaken by Pakistani authorities recently in order to provide public housing, almost sixteen thousand
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trees
were removed
. As it is a
widely
known fact that
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tree
removal
directly
affect our environment causing global warming,
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countryside
construction should not be
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allowed
in any case.

In conclusion
,
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many
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people
believe that the
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land
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available
in the
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countryside
could be
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used
for housing purposes.
However
, in my opinion, these
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areas
are a great source of agriculture and
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trees
needing protection and care.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend time with one or two close friends. Others choose to spend time with a large number of friends. Compare the advantages of each choice. Which of these two ways of spending time do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support y v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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