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Which of the following is better to be done alone rather than in a group: a. studyingb. shoppingc. doing business v.1

Which of the following is better to be done alone rather than in a group: a. studyingb. shoppingc. doing business v. 1
Overpopulationpopulation is becoming a major concern in many countries of the world. The rise of population implies more construction and thus, demolition of natural landscape. This essay discusses the benefits of beautiful sights and ways of preserving them. To commence with, there are multiple benefits of natural beautiful sights. They create a sense of positivity and relaxation in mind, which are helpful in reducing stress. This is why many doctors suggest that everyone should go for a trip to a beautiful place to detox their minds from the daily stress. Moreover, such places help boost the economy of a nation. If these are publicised and maintained as tourist spots, then the administration can attract many tourists from within the country and around the world as well. For example, Goa, a state with black sand beaches, is a famous tourist destination. However, the places of natural beauty are getting destroyed to meet the needs of a growing populationpopulation. Firstly, the administration needs to run campaigns to control population. One such step could be to teach people the importance of having a small family. In addition, some special grants could be introduced for small families. Secondly, the government needs to regulate the land usage in the areas of natural beauty. For example, in Himachal Pradesh, no one from another state can buy a property. Moreover, the government has made regulations that only 50% of the owned area can be used for construction by the people. This helps in maintaining the greenery and controlling the influx of people from the other states. To conclude, there are multiple benefits of preserving nature for an individual and a community as well. To conserve it, the administration needs to make some stringent laws to regulate the construction and population growth.
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Overpopulationpopulation
is becoming a major concern in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
countries of the world. The rise of population implies more construction and
thus
, demolition of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
landscape. This essay discusses the benefits of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
sights and ways of preserving them.

To commence with, there are multiple benefits of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
sights. They create a sense of positivity and relaxation in mind, which are helpful in reducing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
. This is why
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
doctors suggest that everyone should go for a trip to a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
place to detox their minds from the daily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
.
Moreover
, such places
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
boost the economy of a nation. If these are
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publicised
and maintained as tourist spots, then the administration can attract
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
tourists from within the country and around the world
as well
.
For example
, Goa, a state with black sand beaches, is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
tourist destination.

However
, the places of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
beauty are getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the
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needs
of a growing
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populationpopulation
.
Firstly
, the administration
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
to run campaigns to control population. One such step could be to teach
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
the importance of having a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
family.
In addition
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
special grants could
be introduced
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
families.
Secondly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
to regulate the land usage in the areas of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
beauty.
For example
, in Himachal Pradesh, no one from another state can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a property.
Moreover
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has made regulations that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
50% of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
area can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for construction by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in maintaining the greenery and controlling the influx of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from the other states.

To conclude
, there are multiple benefits of preserving nature for an individual and a community
as well
. To conserve it, the administration
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
stringent laws to regulate the construction and population growth.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Which of the following is better to be done alone rather than in a group: a. studyingb. shoppingc. doing business v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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