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Parents make the best teachers. Do you agree with that statement? Use specific examples and reasons to explain your answer v.1

Parents make the best teachers. Use specific examples and reasons to explain your answer v. 1
It is observed that in the growing nations, the quality of the natural resources is getting affected by the rapid rate owing to the commercial sectors and construction. Government has to ban the cutting rate of trees and law should be implied to make proper disposal of the wastage of the firms, otherwise legal actions and penalty should be imposed on the entrepreneur for the deterrent of the atmosphere. The air quality is getting reduced drastically because of the pollution that is increasing at an alarming rate. Every individual is commuting through their personal vehicle; the increasing rate of cars will be proven detrimental to the whole society. Domestic and commercial litters are damaging the beauty of the environment; litter is getting disposed in running water which is harmful for the health of the human beings, including animals and plants, consequently the quality of water is getting affected. Everyone is spending massive amount of water, taking showers, washing clothes. Leakage from pipes and open taps is vulnerable. Government and society should take crucial steps to protect the environment immediately, before it will get too late even to think. Firstly, the usage of vehicle should get limited, public transport should be advertised and promote to commute, which will not only save their pivotal time, money, but also protect the atmosphere, moreover the chances of gridlock will be equal to zero. That will reduce noise and air pollution. Secondly, recycling should be the primary way to dispose the wastage and garbage should be destroying far from the residential places. Society can educate the man regarding the value of water and how to minimize the wastage and leakage. Fine and imprisonment should be followed strictly to put a good hold in the water and air pollution, otherwise life of the human being will be less or painful. In conclusion, the quality of air and water is possible to improve only if government and society will get serious actions in the urgency, otherwise life will not be possible on the earth in the coming years. Education, resources and heavy fines can play a pivotal role in the environment protection for the welfare of the plants and living beings.
It
is observed
that in the growing nations, the
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quality
of the natural resources is getting
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affected
by the rapid
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rate
owing to the commercial sectors and construction.
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Government
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has to
ban the cutting
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rate
of trees and law should
be implied
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
proper disposal of the wastage of the firms,
otherwise
legal actions and penalty should
be imposed
on the entrepreneur for the deterrent of the atmosphere.

The
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air
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quality
is getting
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reduced
drastically
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because
of the pollution
that is
increasing at an alarming
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rate
. Every individual is commuting through their personal vehicle; the increasing
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rate
of cars will
be proven
detrimental to the whole
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society
. Domestic and commercial litters are damaging the beauty of the environment; litter is getting disposed in running
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water
which is harmful for the health of the human beings, including animals and plants,
consequently
the
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quality
of
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water
is getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
. Everyone is spending massive amount of
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water
, taking showers, washing clothes. Leakage from pipes and open taps is vulnerable.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
and
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society
should take crucial steps to protect the environment immediately,
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before
it will
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get
too late even to
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think
.
Firstly
, the usage of vehicle should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
limited, public transport should
be advertised
and promote to commute, which will not
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only
save their pivotal time, money,
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but
also
protect the atmosphere,
moreover
the chances of gridlock will be equal to zero. That will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
noise and
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air
pollution.
Secondly
, recycling should be the primary way to dispose the wastage and garbage should be destroying far from the residential places.
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Society
can educate the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
regarding the value of
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water
and how to minimize the wastage and leakage. Fine and imprisonment should
be followed
strictly
to put a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
hold in the
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water
and
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air
pollution,
otherwise
life of the human being will be less or painful.

In conclusion
, the
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quality
of
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air
and
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water
is possible to
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improve
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only
if
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government
and
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society
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
serious actions in the urgency,
otherwise
life will not be possible on the earth in the coming years. Education, resources and heavy fines can play a pivotal role in the environment protection for the welfare of the plants and living beings.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Parents make the best teachers. Use specific examples and reasons to explain your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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