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Which do you think is the best way to choose a career?

Which do you think is the best way to choose a career? d3lyo
Choosing a career is one of the most important decisions that a person takes in his life. Some people select a career that has a well-off social status attached to it and also, offers a good livelihood with a huge paycheck; others prefer to follow their hearts and select a job, where they will enjoy working thoroughly. I believe that one should select a well-paying job that is stable, where you can always provide for your families' needs and demands. Good social status follows a good lifestyle, so your job should provide you the capability to enjoy all the materialistic things that life has to offer. If you would like to follow your passion, then you can always pursue it as a hobby instead of pursuing it as a full-time career. Firstly, I prefer white-collar jobs because they are more valued in the market compared to other kind of jobs. In case you lose your current job, there is a higher probablity to find another job in a relatively shorter timeframe. For instance, an IT engineer who earns 80, 000 Euros annually will easily find another job if he loses his current one, due to the high value that the market places on his technical competencies and skills. Also, because he earns a high salary he might have sufficient savings as a buffer which would provide him enough time to search for a new job. As a result, he will lead a stable life compared to others who might not have a white-collar job. Secondly, a well-paying job gives you the capacity to provide not only for your family's needs but also their demands. One can fulfill the needs of their family even by working a lower income job, but if you wish to fulfill the demands of your family, then you definitely need a high-paying job. For example, if you have sufficient savings in your bank account, you can easily write a cheque to buy a Playstation 5 gaming console for your younger one, or a decent first car for your older one. This is something that might not possible if you have a lower income. Lastly, life has a lot of luxuries to offer but you can enjoy them only if you make the big bucks. Whether one chooses to buy a lot of materialistic things or not, is entirely up to them. What is important is, to be in a comfortable position to afford whatever one might need or want. In order to be in this position, one should make a career in a well-paying role. I do understand that living this kind of lifestyle is not for everyone, some people find happiness in other things in life, and I completely respect their life-choices. However, for me personally, the former career choice is the better one. Even if you select the former career choice, you always have a chance to pursue your passion as a hobby. The above-mentioned cases are some of the reasons, why I believe that it is better to pursue a career that pays well and offers a good social status compared to a career where you will enjoy working but might earn a lower income.
Choosing a
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decisions that a person takes in his
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that has a well-off social status attached to it and
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livelihood with a huge paycheck; others prefer to follow their hearts and
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job
, where they will
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working
thoroughly
. I believe that one should
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select
a well-paying
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that is
stable, where you can always
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for your families'
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and demands.
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social status follows a
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lifestyle,
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your
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should
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you the capability to
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all the materialistic things that
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life
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has to
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. If you would like to follow your passion, then you can always pursue it as a hobby
instead
of pursuing it as a full-time career.

Firstly
, I prefer white-collar
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jobs
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because
they are more valued in the market compared to
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other
kind of
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jobs
. In case you lose your
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current
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, there is a higher
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probablity
to find another
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in a
relatively
shorter timeframe.
For instance
, an IT engineer who earns 80, 000 Euros
annually
will
easily
find another
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job
if he loses his
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current
one, due to the high value that the market places on his technical competencies and
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skills
.
Also
,
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because
he earns a high salary he
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have sufficient savings as a buffer which would
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him
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enough
time to search for a new
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job
.
As a result
, he will lead a stable
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life
compared to others who
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not have a white-collar job.

Secondly
, a well-paying
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gives you the capacity to
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not
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for your family's
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needs
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but
also
their demands. One can fulfill the
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needs
of their family even by working a lower income
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job
,
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if you wish to fulfill the demands of your family, then you definitely
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a high-paying
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job
.
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, if you have sufficient savings in your bank account, you can
easily
write a
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to
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Playstation
5 gaming console for your younger one, or a decent
first
car for your older one. This is something that
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might
not possible if you have a lower income.

Lastly
,
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has
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a lot of
luxuries to
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them
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a lot of
materialistic things or not, is
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up to them. What is
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important
is, to be in a comfortable position to afford whatever one
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or want. In order to be in this position, one should
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in a well-paying role.

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find happiness in
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, and I completely respect their life-choices.
However
, for me
personally
, the former
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choice is the better one. Even if you
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the former
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choice, you always have a chance to pursue your passion as a hobby. The above-mentioned cases are
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some of the
reasons, why I believe that it is better to pursue a
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that pays well and
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a
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good
social status compared to a
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career
where you will
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working
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earn a lower income.
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IELTS essay Which do you think is the best way to choose a career?

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