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Important thing; Being health or money

Important thing; Being health or money JVwGw

Although some argue that which health or money would be valuable, in my opinion, health generates a significant portion of our lives and provide us with productive days. This essay will analyze the statement and gives a logical conclusion. First of all, human beings can no longer live without being healthy. Once they start having physical issues, it can be the highest priority to undertake medical treatments. Most patients would never think that they earn money as much as possible if they were in a serious situation. Therefore, they should keep their better bodies and mental status. People can consider how to earn more money once their body conditions settle down. Additionally, they can create effective ways to make their life more immeasurable since they stay healthy. Furthermore, having a productive life will make one's life enriched. For example, some might spend free time with their family and others might see the tremendous view of a mountain. The lifestyle can be resourceful without money and they can realize how critical living healthy is. In conclusion, although more would be an essential part of people's lives, keeping stable mental as well as physical balance produces plenty of benefits. I believe that being healthy outweighs the importance of money.

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 would be valuable, in my opinion, health generates a significant portion of our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
 and provide us with productive days. This essay will analyze the statement and gives a logical conclusion.

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, human beings can no longer This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
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 having physical issues, it can be the highest priority to undertake medical treatments. Most patients would never This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 that they earn You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
 as much as possible if they were in a serious situation. Therefore
, they should This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 their better bodies and mental status.

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People
 can consider how to earn more You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
 once their body conditions settle down. Additionally
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make
 their life more immeasurable since they stay healthy.

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, having a productive life will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 one's life enriched. For example
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some
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and others
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 the tremendous view of a mountain. The lifestyle can be resourceful without Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).money, and
money and
 they can realize how critical living healthy is.

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, although more would be an essential part of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
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lives
, keeping stable mental as well
 as physical balance produces This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
plenty
 of benefits.

I believe that being healthy outweighs the importance of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
. 