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which college is the best for the ms in us for mechanical

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I graduated with a B. Tech in Mechanical Engineering from the AVN Institute Of Engineering And Technology, Hyderabad which is affiliated to the JNTU-Hyderabad. After this, I joined one of the leading Cooperative Urban bank, The Deccan Cooperative Urban Bank Ltd. As, System Administrator and information assurance analyst I selected this profession out of my studies because, from kid I was passionate to computer hardware. on the contrary I preferred Mechanical Engineering as my main stream in B. Tech due to the fact of the lack of colleges that providing Information and Technology course in our region. During my work period, I developed technical skills as a professional and attained a number of training programs held by various organization. Among them I attend two training programs on Cyber Security. After attending that training I felt cyber security subject interesting and came to know how vital is cyber security and did a number of enquires in online regarding the course. As the world goes mobile with the boom of e-commerce, there is a raising need for Cyber Security. Most of the people believe that their data is secure and their actions are confidential. But we frequently hear incidents of system hacking and Server crashes on the News without understanding the magnitude of these kinds of catastrophes. The fight against piracy is real, but we have not even close to identifying at least fifty percent of the sources to pirated material, let alone tracking them down. My desire for Cyber Security combined with my background in hardware & Analytical skills and excellence in Mathematics, I would like to contribute to creating a more secure cyberspace. The Master’s program in Cyber Security and Management at the University of …………………. . Seems to be tailored to my field of interest, especially after the course modules were altered this year. With the highly qualified faculty professors, research facilities and computing resources, the University will definitely enable me develop myself into a Cyber Security professional. I look forward to a rewarding association with your esteemed University.
I graduated with a B. Tech in Mechanical Engineering from the AVN Institute Of Engineering And Technology, Hyderabad which
is affiliated
to the
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JNTU-Hyderabad
. After this, I
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joined
one of the leading Cooperative Urban bank, The Deccan Cooperative Urban Bank Ltd. As, System Administrator and information assurance analyst

I selected this profession out of my studies
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because
, from kid I was passionate to computer hardware.
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on
the contrary I preferred Mechanical Engineering as my main stream in B. Tech due to the fact of the lack of colleges that providing Information and Technology course in our region.

During my work period, I developed technical
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skills
as a professional and attained a number of training programs held by various organization. Among them I attend two training programs on
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Cyber
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Security
. After attending that training I felt
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cyber
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
security
subject interesting and came to know how vital is
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cyber
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security
and did a number of
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enquires
in online regarding the course.

As the world goes mobile with the boom of e-commerce, there is a raising need for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Cyber
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Security
. Most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that their data is secure and their actions are confidential.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
we
frequently
hear incidents of system hacking and Server crashes on the News without understanding the magnitude of these kinds of catastrophes. The fight against piracy is real,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
we have not even close to identifying at least fifty percent of the sources to pirated material,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
alone tracking them down.

My desire for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Cyber
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Security
combined with my background in hardware & Analytical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and excellence in Mathematics, I would like to contribute to creating a more secure cyberspace.

The Master’s program in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Cyber
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Security
and Management at the University of ………………….
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.
Seems to
be tailored
to my field of interest,
especially
after the course modules
were altered
this year. With the
highly
qualified faculty professors, research facilities and computing resources, the University will definitely enable me develop myself into a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Cyber
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Security
professional. I look forward to a rewarding association with your esteemed University.
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IELTS essay which college is the best for the ms in us for mechanical

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