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Which celebrity would you like to meet?

Which celebrity would you like to meet? 0Bng3
Well to tell the truth I would like to meet Chris de burgh. Do you know him? He is my favorite singer based in Ireland. He’s got some beautiful tracks like Say Goodbye To It All, The Lady In Red, The Last Time I Cried. Well if I could spend a day with him I would like to go to a café in Spain and I could have my both favorites together I mean my favorite singer and my favorite country. I would ask him to play some beautiful songs as I mentioned earlier with his guitar and had coffee together. When I listen to his songs something strong appears inside me. Something really fascinating touches my heart that it makes me feel I am still alive. That’s why he is the one I want to spend a day with. Now I want to play one of his songs for you that is my favorite called Missing you
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Well if I could spend a day with him I would like to go to a café in Spain and I could have my both
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country. I would ask him to play
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I listen to his songs something strong appears inside me. Something
really
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alive. That’s why he is the one I want to spend a day with.
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I want to play one of his songs for you
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IELTS essay Which celebrity would you like to meet?

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
157 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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