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Which are more important to you:your family or friends?

Which are more important to you: your family or friends? 15GWG
Happiness consists of many components, including a lovely family, a trustfull friend. Both of these social groups are extremily vital. Because everybody needs supporting, love and attention. When we are happy, we need close people who we can share our happiness with or when we are sad, we need family and friends who support us. By myself, the family is more essential than fortunes, fame ir success. Because the member of your family is always on your side in different situations. Friends are also important. But they must betray you. So it is not easy to find faithfull, true mates. If you do it, they stay for a lifetime and become as close as your family forever.
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and friends who support us. By myself, the
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is more essential than fortunes, fame
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IELTS essay Which are more important to you: your family or friends?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
117 words
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