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People visiting other countries should adapt to the customs and behaviors expected there. They should not expect the host country to welcome different customs and behaviors. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

People visiting other countries should adapt to the customs and behaviors expected there. They should not expect the host country to welcome different customs and behaviors. v. 2
To a certain extent I agree that visitors to other countries should adapt the customs and traditions of the host country; however, I also think that the host countries should accept the visitors' cultural differences. This will be discussed in this essay. Nowadays, the number of people who travel to other countries with the aim of fulfilling the business missions, taking a holiday and the like is on the increase. In a big number of host countries the customs, traditions and social behaviors are totally different and it is wise for the visitors to adapt themselves to the culture and rules of the host country. Take Iran for example, a country with especial dress code and strict rules about consuming alcoholic drinks. A visitor is expected to be aware of the conditions and respect the rules to be welcomed. On the other hand, some travellers do not have enough information about the customs and behaviors of the host country in details which seems natural. The government authorities should be aware of this issue and underestimate some severe rules for tourists and visitors. Consequently, the globetrotters and tourists would enjoy their trip and it makes a good memory in their mind. Besides, it can be an effective, powerful and positive propaganda for the host country to attract more visitors. To sum up, it is true that each country has its own traditions, rules and behaviors; they should accept the visitors' cultural differences and be hospitable to expand the tourist industry in their country.
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;
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in this essay.

Nowadays, the number of
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who travel to other
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countries
with the aim of fulfilling the business missions, taking a holiday and the like is on the increase. In a
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big
number of
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host
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countries
the customs, traditions and social behaviors are
totally
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different
and it is wise for the
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visitors
to adapt themselves to the culture and
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rules
of the
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host
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country
. Take Iran
for example
, a
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country
with especial dress code and strict
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rules
about consuming alcoholic drinks. A
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visitor
is
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expected
to be aware of the conditions and respect the
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to
be welcomed
.

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,
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travellers
do not have
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enough
information about the customs and behaviors of the
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host
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country
in
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details
which seems natural. The
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government
authorities should be aware of this issue and underestimate
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some
severe
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rules
for tourists and
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visitors
.
Consequently
, the globetrotters and tourists would enjoy their trip and it
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makes
a
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good
memory in their mind.
Besides
, it can be an effective, powerful and
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positive
propaganda for the
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host
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country
to attract more visitors.

To sum up, it is true that each
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country
has its
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own
traditions,
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rules
and behaviors; they should accept the
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visitors&
#039; cultural differences and be hospitable to expand the tourist industry in their
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country
.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People visiting other countries should adapt to the customs and behaviors expected there. They should not expect the host country to welcome different customs and behaviors. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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