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when people move to another country, some prefer to follow the customs of their new country, while other prefer to keep their own customs. which one do you prefer? use details and examples to support your explanation. v.1

when people move to another country, some prefer to follow the customs of their new country, while other prefer to keep their own customs. which one do you prefer? use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1
It is irrefutable that globalization has allowed people from all origins and culture to settle in different parts of the world. Immigrating to a country with cultural and language difference can be challenging and does create some serious issues related to safety and mis communication. I totally agree with the statement and in this essay, I will support my view with examples. The most significant disadvantage of living in many of the foreign country is understanding the pronunciation. In the recent years, because of the global media, we often see reports related to firing on some foreign nationals. For example, an Indian citizen, on vacation, to the USA was shot dead by an officer, as he was unable to identify himself clearly. As a consequence, the officer was fired as the man died on site. Since then, the government has been cautious in providing visas to tourists and visiting parents. Another drawback of working in a foreign country is mis communication. Many people in order to impress their colleagues use words which alter the meaning of the sentence, resulting in a loss. To illustrate this, Time magazine wrote a column stating that immigrants use higher level vocabulary, which changes the meaning of a sentence. In contrast, the locals mostly use basic language to present their view. As a result, the management of most of the companies are having locals, so that they can set agenda's in a better way. In conclusion, moving to a different country is always a plus. In my opinion, it has its drawback and should be considered before moving. Also, we should prepare ourselves for the move. As in any civilisation, language has always been an important pillar.
It is irrefutable that globalization has
allowed
people
from all origins and culture to settle in
different
parts of the world. Immigrating to a
country
with cultural and language difference can be challenging and does create
some
serious issues related to safety and
mis
communication. I
totally
agree
with the statement and in this essay, I will support my view with examples.

The most significant disadvantage of living in
many
of the foreign
country
is understanding
the pronunciation. In the recent years,
because
of the global media, we
often
see
reports related to firing on
some
foreign nationals.
For example
, an Indian citizen, on vacation, to the USA
was shot
dead by an officer, as he was unable to identify himself
clearly
. As a consequence, the officer
was fired
as the
man
died
on site. Since then, the
government
has been cautious in providing visas to tourists and visiting parents.

Another drawback of working in a foreign
country
is
mis
communication.
Many
people
in order to impress their colleagues
use
words which alter the meaning of the sentence, resulting in a loss. To illustrate this, Time magazine wrote a column stating that immigrants
use
higher level vocabulary, which
changes
the meaning of a sentence.
In contrast
, the locals
mostly
use
basic language to present their view.
As a result
, the management of most of the
companies
are having locals,
so
that they can set agenda's in a better way.

In conclusion
, moving to a
different
country
is always a plus. In my opinion, it has its drawback and should
be considered
before
moving.
Also
, we should prepare ourselves for the
move
. As in any
civilisation
, language has always been an
important
pillar.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay when people move to another country, some prefer to follow the customs of their new country, while other prefer to keep their own customs. which one do you prefer? use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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