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When designing a building, many people think that they should focus on the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

When designing a building, many people think that they should focus on the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion. G3wko
People have different views about the essentials of a building’s function as compared to the external beauty when it comes to planning a construction. From my perspective, the benefits of this tendency are far weightier compared to its drawback, which will be meticulously explained as follows. On the one hand, it cannot be denied that focusing on the usage of the building offers two major disadvantages. It stands to reason that people may put more of an emphasis on how a building looks rather than how the building will be used at their first look, thereby those buildings, which are designed to be visually attractive, might generate more profits than others. These factors not only seem closely linked to a decrease in the value of the building but also exert negative influences on the owner of the building. Another drawback would revolve around the attraction of a city. For instance, a lot of cities are attracted by the exquisite beauty of the buildings, which also create a huge number of tourist destinations. Thus, if the owners don't pay much attention to the exterior appearance, it could affect the tourism of the neighbourhood. On the other hand, the usage of a building, in my point of view, presents more benefits. Indeed, if we focus more on the intended use of a building, it could be more economical for the owner or even for the users. The owners can pay more money for the facilities as well as necessary equipment instead of wasting their money on the appearance. Therefore, we can also take full advantage of the construction. In addition, focussing on the functionality of a design can bring back more convenience and comfort for their users. For example, a hospital, which focuses more on its facilities rather than its outside looking, will surely provide the best environment for their patients. In conclusion, despite the fact that focusing on the appearance of a building can have several merits, I still believe that the benefits of paying attention to the function of a building outweigh them in the long term.
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views about the essentials of a
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building’s
function as compared to the external beauty when it
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comes
to planning a construction. From my perspective, the benefits of this tendency are far weightier compared to its drawback, which will be
meticulously
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explained
as follows.

On the one hand, it cannot
be denied
that focusing on the usage of the
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building
offers two major disadvantages. It stands to reason that
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people
may put more of an emphasis on how a
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building
looks
rather
than how the
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building
will be
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used
at their
first
look, thereby those
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buildings
, which
are designed
to be
visually
attractive, might generate more profits than others. These factors not
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only
seem
closely
linked to a decrease in the value of the
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building
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but
also
exert
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negative
influences on the
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owner
of the
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building
. Another drawback would revolve around the attraction of a city.
For instance
,
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a lot of
cities
are attracted
by the exquisite beauty of the
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buildings
, which
also
create a huge number of tourist destinations.
Thus
, if the
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owners
don't pay much attention to the exterior appearance, it could affect the tourism of the
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neighbourhood
.

On the other hand
, the usage of a
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building
, in my point of view, presents more benefits.
Indeed
, if we focus more on the intended
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
, it could be more economical for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owner
or even for the users. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owners
can pay more money for the facilities
as well
as necessary equipment
instead
of wasting their money on the appearance.
Therefore
, we can
also
take full advantage of the construction.
In addition
, focussing on the functionality of a design can bring back more convenience and comfort for their users.
For example
, a hospital, which focuses more on its facilities
rather
than its outside looking, will
surely
provide the best environment for their patients.

In conclusion
, despite the fact that focusing on the appearance of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
can have several merits, I
still
believe that the benefits of paying attention to the function of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
outweigh them in the long term.

IELTS essay When designing a building, many people think that they should focus on the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

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