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What's your story? Tell a personal story.

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Some happens are irreparable unless you are very lucky. As I said in the past, we have big family and also have a many ants, uncles, nieces and nephews. When I was child. We went on a picnic altogether. Imagine about 35 -40 guys most of them children. One the one weekend all the family was our gest to the Oil company’s club that it had restaurant in the middle of a beautiful garden. next to the garden there was a children's playground. At the midnight when we come back home we understood my three years old sister lost. My mother and was so scared and cried. We asked from all wasn’t Nazanin with you? It’s my sister’s name. She wasn’t in anybody’s car. What happened Then, my parents and uncles came back to the club confused and frightened. It was far and as you know, it wasn’t mobile phone that days. Finally, they received and thanks god they saw Nazanin calm and relax play at the ground and expected for her parents. but we didn’t forget that two hours.
Some
happens are irreparable unless you are
very
lucky. As I said in the past, we have
big
family and
also
have a
many
ants, uncles, nieces and nephews. When I was child. We went on a picnic altogether. Imagine about 35 -40 guys most of them children. One the one weekend all the family was our
gest
to the Oil
company
’s club that it had restaurant in the middle of a
beautiful
garden.
next
to the garden
there was a children
's playground. At the midnight when we
come
back home we understood my three years
old
sister lost. My mother and was
so
scared and cried. We asked from all wasn’t
Nazanin
with you? It’s my sister’s name. She wasn’t in anybody’s car. What happened Then, my parents and uncles came back to the club confused and frightened. It was far and as you know, it wasn’t mobile phone that days.
Finally
, they received and thanks god they
saw
Nazanin
calm and relax play at the ground and
expected
for her parents.
but
we didn’t forget that two hours.
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IELTS essay What's your story? Tell a personal story.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
180 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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