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what's the most influence of Media on our lives

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Generally speaking several advantages and also disadvantages have been cited as the impact of the media on our lives, but the most remarkable one that pops into my head is the influence of advertising on our purchasing amount. In my opinion companies always try to encourage individuals to buy goods even they don not really need. In addition they asked celebrities, athletics, etc to advertise their products. Consequently people who follow them buy those as soon as possible. Thus, however, it's good to be aware of up-to-minute fashion, it's better to not waste all our income just regarding advertisements
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speaking several advantages and
also
disadvantages have
been cited
as the impact of the media on our
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lives
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the most remarkable one that pops into my head is the influence of advertising on our purchasing amount. In my opinion
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companies
always try to encourage individuals to
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buy
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goods
even they
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don not
really
need. In
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addition they
asked celebrities, athletics, etc to advertise their products.
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Consequently
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people
who follow them
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buy
those as
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soon
as possible.
Thus
,
however
, it's
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good
to be aware of up-to-minute fashion, it's better to not waste all our income
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just
regarding advertisements

IELTS essay what's the most influence of Media on our lives

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
98 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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