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What's the best gift to give to a child?

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In this day and age, opting on the best gift for children and teenagers has been one of the most controversial issues among communities. However, among all available options, I believe that video game console is the best gift that can be both entertaining and educational for children. First and foremost, playing and being entertained has a significant importance for children of various ages since it allows their brain to be developed. According to a study conducted in the University of George Washington, in 2021, children who have plaid with board games and similar types of games have a stronger cognitive ability compared to those who have only plaid with simple toys. In addition, according to Professor Tim Hobs, a clinical psychologist at the University of George Washington, during the first 10 years of our lives, our brain focuses on understanding the universe and the environment around us, and the more we are engaged with this environment the faster our cognitive and problem solving abilities will be developed. On the other hand giving video game console to a child can allow him cope with the technology faster and easier. To summarize, although different children would rather have different gifts, giving a video game console to them can not only have a positive impact on their mental growth but will also widen their horizon through key skills in life. In this era, particularly after the outbreak of COVID 19 virus, more and more classes are going to be held in an online manner. Therefore, becoming able to communicate with friends, teachers and even family members in a cybernetic environment can both develop a new mean of communication in the future societies and also allow children to take part in the classes with the best tutor all over the globe. In order to fulfill this goal, parents have to develop cyber communication skills in their children from very first ages in order to help their children not to be frustrated in the cybernetic future. In contrast, giving video game console to a child will teach them in-game communications with the people of his own age group, which gives them enough confidence to interact with other people all over the globe. All aspects considered, no matter what kind of video game console parents choose to buy for their children as a gift, video game console will always remain a guilty pleasure among both citizens and children since they both are less likely to know about the pros and cons of this gift.
In this day and
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has been one of the most controversial issues among communities.
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video
game
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console
is the best
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gift
that can be both entertaining and educational for children.

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and foremost, playing and
being entertained
has a significant importance for
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children
of various
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ages
since it
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allows
their brain to
be developed
. According to a study conducted in the University of George Washington, in 2021,
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children
who have plaid with board
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games
and similar types of
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games
have a stronger cognitive ability compared to those who have
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only
plaid with simple toys.
In addition
, according to Professor Tim Hobs, a clinical psychologist at the University of George Washington, during the
first
10 years of our
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lives
, our brain focuses on understanding the universe and
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the environment around us
, and the more we
are engaged
with this environment the faster our cognitive and problem solving abilities will
be developed
.
On the other hand
giving
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video
game
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console
to a child can
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allow
him cope with the technology faster and easier.
To summarize
, although
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different
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children
would
rather
have
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gifts
, giving a
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video
game
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console
to them can not
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only
have a
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positive
impact on their mental growth
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but
will
also
widen their horizon through key
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skills
in life.

In this era,
particularly
after the outbreak of
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COVID 19
virus, more and more classes are going to
be held
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in an online manner
.
Therefore
, becoming able to communicate with friends, teachers and even family members in a cybernetic environment can both develop a new mean of communication in the future societies and
also
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allow
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children
to
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take part
in the classes with the best tutor all over the globe. In order to fulfill this goal, parents
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have to
develop cyber communication
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skills
in their
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children
from
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very
first
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ages
in order to
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help
their
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children
not to
be frustrated
in the cybernetic future.
In contrast
, giving
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video
game
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console
to a child will teach them in-game communications with the
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people
of his
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age
group, which gives them
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enough
confidence to interact with other
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people
all over the globe.

All aspects considered, no matter what kind of
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video
game
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console
parents choose to
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buy
for their
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children
as a
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gift
,
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video
game
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console
will always remain a guilty pleasure among both citizens and
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children
since they both are less likely to know about the pros and cons of this
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gift
.
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IELTS essay What's the best gift to give to a child?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
419 words
5.5
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