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What would you do if you have 500sr?

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Most teenagers in our days will probably buy something unnecessary with 500sr, like for example: video games, food and other sorts of things that won’t help them in the future. In this essay I’m going to be telling you what I would do with 500sr. The first thing I would do with 500sr is that I would invest the majority of it to my new business that I’m planning to do which is called A14. it’s basically a programming business that helps teenagers my age make softwares, apps and maybe other programs. The rest of the money that I have I would donate it to my favorite charity which is called GoFundMe causes. You might be wondering why this specific charity, I want to donate to this charity mainly because they are trustworthy and after you donate to them you can see how your donation is impacting the causes. In conclusion, I would use the 500sr for investing my business and donating some of the money to charity.
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teenagers
in our days will
probably
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buy
something unnecessary with 500sr, like
for example
: video games, food and other sorts of things that won’t
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help
them in the future. In this essay I’m going to be telling you what I would do with 500sr.

The
first
thing I would do with 500sr is that I would invest the majority of it to my new business that I’m planning to do which
is called
A14.
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it
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basically
a programming business that
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helps
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teenagers
my age
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make
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softwares
, apps and maybe other programs.

The rest of the money that I have I would donate it to my favorite
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charity
which
is called
GoFundMe causes. You might be wondering why this specific
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charity
, I want to donate to this
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charity
mainly
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because
they are trustworthy and after you donate to them you can
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see
how your donation is impacting the causes.

In conclusion
, I would
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use
the 500sr for investing my business and donating
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some of the
money to
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charity
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IELTS essay What would you do if you have 500sr?

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