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What would you do and how would you live if you were in the USA?

What would you do and how would you live if you were in the USA? e5gJJ
It is quite apparent that many countries, including the United States, are so famous for their favourable conveniences, unique culture, thrilling family atmosphere. Therefore, many people wish to live and study there. Living and studying in a foreign land gives one a chance to explore so many new aspects of life, mainly, easily communicating with people who are from various roots. For example, someone who travels to a foreign country will gain cultural and friendly experience if they live with foreigners at their place of residence. By living with them and in their country, one still feels a family atmosphere that they will be able to tackle with the miss of their own family quite easily. Personally, I would first visit several famous sightseeing places in the USA with my new family members, if I started studying there. It helps me build a nice relationship with them. What is so essential is that I feel like an inhabitant of the country by learning its culture, its a single week-day. I would not have to worry about making simple communicative mistakes that I normally would try to become their new compatriot. Honestly, I have always wanted to find out more about the daily life, traditions and culture of this country. It may be true that there are some sources that you can use for getting information. However, it is better to see real phenomena with your own eyes rather than reading or watching endless videos which are very exciting. In conclusion, I can say that if I lived and studied in the USA in a new family, various kinds of miraculous business and career gates which lead to the highest milestones of success would open towards me.
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countries
, including the United States, are
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so
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famous
for their
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favourable
conveniences, unique culture, thrilling
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family
atmosphere.
Therefore
,
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many
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people
wish to
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live
and study there.

Living and studying in a foreign land gives one a chance to explore
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so
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many
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new
aspects of life,
mainly
,
easily
communicating with
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people
who are from various roots.
For example
, someone who travels to a foreign
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country
will gain cultural and friendly experience if they
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live
with foreigners at their place of residence. By living with them and in their
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country
, one
still
feels a
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family
atmosphere that they will be able to tackle with the miss of their
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own
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family
quite
easily
.

Personally
, I would
first
visit several
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famous
sightseeing places in the USA with my
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new
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family
members, if I
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started
studying there. It
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helps
me build a nice relationship with them. What is
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so
essential is that I feel like an inhabitant of the
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country
by learning its culture,
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its
a single week-day. I would not
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have to
worry about making simple communicative mistakes that I
normally
would try to become their
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new
compatriot.
Honestly
, I have always wanted to find out more about the daily life, traditions and culture of this
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country
. It may be true that there are
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some
sources that you can
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use
for getting information.
However
, it is better to
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see
real phenomena with your
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own
eyes
rather
than reading or watching endless videos which are
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very
exciting.

In conclusion
, I can say that if I
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lived
and studied in the USA in a
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new
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family
, various kinds of miraculous business and career gates which lead to the highest milestones of success would open towards me.
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IELTS essay What would you do and how would you live if you were in the USA?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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